by PaulieG
Actually I don't think this is bad. Kind of hot and made my cock hard.
The writing here is bad. The point of view shifts in the middle of the story. The sentence and paragraph structure is mostly accidental, and any semblance of a plot is surely random chance. The characters lack depth and are nothing more than plastic men, GI Joes and Janes, that the author crudely pushes about the literary landscape.
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Give this tale a pass.
Could it be that you write reviews to push your moral views on others? Get a life.
Hey i thought the story was fine, for those worried about morals, go to jerryfalwell dot com and read his stuff.
have another cock and he sucks it too then thats bi. When she fucks another or tell him about it while he jerks his pathetic little prick then thats wimp.