by Eros_343
It would help you had proof read you story before posting it. Needed to be more detailed, a bit more background would have helped.
Very hot. Being a nudist, I had wished there were clothing optional schools, from grade school, on up through high school. Society is so prudish, hung up regarding casual nudity.
Good start, they need to run into his sister in school and she can help her brother and his partner.
Since this submitter obviously holds everyone who was unfortunate enough to read this in such low regard (they didn't even take a second to review what they vomited out to catch errors that a second grader would catch), I'm not going to hold back.
This is garbage. Go find an imagination. Go find an education, then learn how to write and how to use English.
In the meantime, quit wasting this site's resources and our time.
I agree, you need a proofreader. But I will watch for more chapters too. I liked the original stories in this genre.
Liked the start needs a bit of work on buildup but overall can’t wait to see more
Great fantasy that probably all of us have had in some form or another - being naked in front of others and not being able to do anything about it. I wonder if there are any scientific studies on this common phenomenon. My only complaint is that the author should better proofread his otherwise excellent composition for grammatical and spelling errors. There were lots of them!
I wish I’d been given this opportunity at school, I would have been wanking all over school
Please take the time to print out a hard copy and read it aloud to hear the mistakes. There were more than a half dozen in the first screen worth. It's a good story, but don't rush getting it out with so many errors.