All Comments on 'Navigation'

As fine a lesbian love story as I've ever savored, Sublimely crafted!

Man, this was one of the easiest 5-star reviews I've ever given. Fantastic work. It's so hard to quickly imbue characters with such depth without turning their emotional journey into bathos, but you nailed it. The desperation in Isabel's entire existence was palpable from the outset. Thank you for this!

I have expressed my admiration for your writing skills elsewhere so I won't repeat myself, but it is clear from the many favourable comments here I am not alone in holding your skills in such high regard.

Well done yet again!

It’s as much a love story, of unconditional bonds that transcend traditional ones, as it is a sexually charged tale, but then it’s very much that too. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Yeah. Perfect!

Jessus fucking Christ! Ahhh! I love you for how your stories just.... Fucking hell! How do you do that! gah! That story is so beautiful! Brava! Thank you...

such love

It is scary how well you write. I absorb every story and jump right into the next one. My one fear is that you will stop submitting stories. I really hope you are writing professionally. You have a gift with the use of the language and how you use it to paint pictures that are vivid and real. Thank you.

You know, I saw it coming the second Emma phoned up sounding upset. Fucking cheaters man. I hate them with an intensity that scares me. It's always the best people that get fucked over as well. It's so bloody tragic. Thank goodness she has her wonderful sister. Anyway, needless to say, after hearing about Emma's suffering and seeing her pain, I was invested. I needed to see her get her happy ending. And that feeling only strengthened as I learned more about Bella and her longing.

I can't help but wonder if the characters in these stories that were hurt are infused with something from your own personal experiences. Did someone hurt you like that? If so I'm truly sorry. No one should ever have to experience a hurt like that. I hope it didn't leave any lasting effects, if that is indeed the case, and that you're happy and living your best life :)

All that intimate tenderness when they confess to each... I'll admit I lost it and the tears flowed. After all that build up and with how much I can relate to Bella, it's no surprise really. Really well done. You have a gift for writing, truly.

I wish there was a second part, kind of like with the Alexis story, that shows a bit more of their future. Emma decides to pack up and travel the world with her sister and they live a wonderful life of adventure, growing old together and sharing a most profound and beautiful love every day. That's what I'll assume happened anyway :) Maybe a little revenge on that cheating asshole as well.

What a fabulously wonderful story...

Bittersweet, and the dialogue flows nicely. Little shifts, the mood rising and falling.

You do write beautiful conversations...

5 stars well earned...

Cagivagurl

As always beautifully written. As always I wish there was a follow up lol so glad I found your writing so sad there are not 2000 entries 😀 BardnotBard.

You have a way with words, describing sexual and nonsexual acts, as well as emotions, both intimate and everyday, that boggles my mind! I thank Dog for every wonderful and titillating story you write!

Thank you!

oh, this is very cute and pure. they are so good together... love the dynamic. jealous too,,,

Lovely. You have a way of expressing tender emotions as well as the "sex".

Also, I imagine you have a great knowledge and affinity for sailing!

Perhaps the best story I've read anywhere! I needed a great love story tonight.

Superb.

such a lovely, touching, mesmerizing story... it blew me away, while I was slowly touching myself, reading slowly to make each word special. Thank you for sharing your world.

Peugeot 207 owner's club baby !

I love this story. The characters were great, the story line is terrific, but it was the writing itself that just flat awed me. The way the author set up each scene, wove the characters and the dialogue in and out and around it, and then seemlessly eased into the next scene. Only to start the weaving again. So smooth, so….

awesome. Thank you Wanda, for sharing this story with us.

This story is OMG Awesome! The characters are soooo real and the perceptive dialogue really grabs you. At times I was holding my breath in anticipation of the next line. The only thing I'd change is the author's pseudonym, One Hit Wanda, because everything she writes is amazingly good. Follow her!

Okay, again, absolutely dreamy.

Absolutely Excellent

Briliant. And another story gets tagged for reference WRT my writing.

That was absolutely lovely. Thank you.

Brilliant as ever.

More like this please.

That was good :) And lovely to have it woven around my favourite hobby and playground of the Solent

I am crying while I write this. What a beautiful love story. WOW!

Excellent . . . A love story more than anything else between two lonely people who had so much to give each other. What a discovery they made and life changing. For once, your nautical terminology was right on and it supported their journey of discovery and intimacy. How I miss the sea.

You have some great stories. I loved this one.

What a beautiful tale of true love and tenderness...CINCO ESTRELLAS!

For as long as I can remember, I’ve thought the truest love in the world was between sisters.

I think this is the only time in my 62 yrs of life that i wish i had been born as a woman , i'm astounded as to how much this story has got to me , i have read countless stories of incest , lesbianism , and every other type of sex , but this has got to be the most beautifully written true to life love story i have ever read , if this is not based on some true event in your life , then you are blessed an imagination equalled by no other . Thankyou for the time you have taken to write this story , if it has not affected anyone else , you have given me a lot to think about .

That was HOT!!

That was wonderous, I love the way your stories are a symphony, Please write an epilogue to this story, I so want to read about their vacation!

Each of your stories in a standalone gem. Thanks to the solid foundation of the mechanics of your craft, as a result of which I the reader don't have to stumble over misspellings, mispunctuations, and errors in grammar or syntax, you tell your stories with such a crystal clear style and with such careful construction and pacing, that we enter into your stories and let them sweep us along to a satisfying conclusion.

What struck me in particular with this story was your ability to describe in words what a woman experiences when filled with a penis and then her experience of oral and digital lovemaking with a woman she loves wholeheartedly.

Your artfulness is a magnificent gift. Thank you for sharing it with us!

Great story line and emtoins also knowing that part of the South Coast well and having sailed into Cowes, brought good memories back. MORE please

I really liked it. It's obviously very similar to "Alexis" but I didn't mind. The familiarity was kind of comforting. I hope you'll do another one. Sister/sister stories are so rare on this site. Good ones, rarer still. Thank you for your contributions.

The first lesbian story I've read. Your descriptions of their feelings seemed real, so I suspect you're writing from experience. Now, I wanna watch...no, not a Rolex.

Such a beautifully written story - terrific right the way through.

Beautifully written. Really good characterisation and well paced. This is one of the most professional stories that I have read on this site. You have a real talent and should consider looking for an agent and writing a lot more. Very well done.

A great story. Wonderful characters. Well done.

This is your best story. Please give us more.

It was a fascinating story! I found that you initially were describing the protagonist as a gal that was a little bit rough around the edges, perhaps from her perceived unwanted Ness. And the way she described her boat jargon. It struck me that you turn the tables a bit. That the antagonist became the one who turned her around. A bisexual lady. Who was her sister. We never found out who it was that Emma was crushing on but I think we have a good idea. I am a male, but I found myself tearing up several times. Your development of the characters, the emotions, the situations were absolutely on point as to what they were doing, as they took their trek down the coast. I congratulate you!!!

I do so enjoy reading your work. I am about out of unread stories by you. Like Nevil Shute stories I have not already read, I save them for special times. You need to write more! Nevil can't.

Another beautiful story. The incest created a barrier to be overcome and it helped build tension. You are one of my most read authors here.

Thank you for the time and thought that went into the writing of this story. The story drew out emotions, has an incredibly well crafted story line, held my attention throughout a rather long time. I never once lost interest while reading. Please write some more.

Such soft, almost painful yearnings expressed in perfect lines. Amazingly warm and satisfying tale rewards the reader emotionally.

Take away the incest, take away the same sex ...this tale is about filling an emptiness that comes from a lack of being in love, a lack and being aware and wanting to be in love.

I don’t think this could have been any better than it is.

Thank you for sharing your talents with us.

Please keep writing.

Joey.

So well written! Thank you for sharing this with us!

As a long term author I'm always disappointed that my stories get a rush of comments when I first publish them, and then...nothing! But it struck me that I'm that sort of reader too, so I resolved to comment more. The caveat is that I'll only do it for work that I think is worth my time.

Great stories must be well constructed, with realistic dialogue and good english - and the storyline must be convincing. There must also be sufficient detail to draw the reader in, and to relate to the characters portrayed.

Few writers can pull it off, but your story ticks every box. I don't often give five stars, but "Navigation" was easily worth that. Well done, OneHitWanda, and thank you for sharing it with us.

There are precious few stories here that are good enough to read again, this is one of them.

Wonderful writing and both character and story development. Sexy and erotic without being gratuitous.

Well done.

This is the 1st time I have ever read and incest story from the point of view of a lesbian. I have never read an Lesbian story this intense before, handled with such a delicate touch. I normally would have stopped reading it after the 1st paragraph, because I am not into this type of reading material. However, the author had me hooked on the story because of the way it was written. It was the best read I have encountered in a very long time. I have given it 5 stars because it was deserving of such a high score. The prose was excellent, and there wasn't one typographical error. You can't get any better than this on any level.

You write sublimely.

Poetry, sheer poetry.

what many others have said. I have no interest in same sex relationships, absolutely nothing against them. It's just that reading your story, gave me thrills and chills, i never expected. I should have though having read your other stories here. You write love stories, sex is almost incidental but erotic as hell and beautifully written passages in the overall journey of our protagonists. I also love (as an Englishman myself) that you write in British English with proper usage and spelling. Totally enjoyable, not sure I'd read anyone else's same sex stories but i absolutely will one of yours.

Loved the story. Sex between same sex couples does nothing for me and I don't usually read stories centered around it my specific interest in in sibling incest. I have nothing against same sex relationships but I don't find descriptions of sex between them erotic. My wider family group includes a same sex family with two adopted children and they are embraced as part of our family group just as the hetro families are.

I was prompted to read this story after reading 'Eventide' which I thought was a great story and made me want to read more of your incest related stories.

I don't know much about boats and sailing but found the nautical descriptions involving and could imagine myself there on the boat. I'm guessing that you have some experience of sailing from the way you describe the aspects of sailing.

Hope you continue to write and publish on this site.

Very easy.

Some of the most erotic sex encounters that I've ever read!

Check that. Not good. Great.

I don't usually get into sister on sister porn,but this was artfully written. The plot and character development had me forgetting that this was erotica. Well done. Write more

The build up of the story, the fleshing out of the characters all masterfully written. Even after the second reading this story did not get old. Well told and crafted I hope to see many more from you. And I've got the other guy beat. I'm 60 and was also blubbering. Well done.

Just WOW! Amazing story! Loved everything about it , great characters fantastic build

up,Love and Hot sex! Thanks Wanda

This is the third time reading this story. It is the raw emotions that keeps bringing me back. I cry I smile but in the end I feel the emotions in the characters. I just wish for more of your excellent story telling.

Damn it. I'm a 58 year-old man and this had me snivelling like a fucking baby. Beautiful.

That was a wonderful story, well written and sexy.

I'm a regular lurker around here and enjoy all the different stories I have been reading for the last few years.

Living in east cowes myself, also with a love of the sea this is one of those times when you read the words and the mind just instantly conjures up the images as if you was watching a first rate movie.

Fucking fantastic, and had me in such a state that just taking a break for a few minutes of reading this level of erotica had my knob wet for hours..

Think I will be enjoying myself soon indeed lmfao..

C

Would really like to see a follow up to this story; what happened after the storm on the way back to home port? Do they ever make it to Iceland and or Greece?

Please follow up if possible

WAA

What a great story. I live in West Cowes, just across the river from where the final scene took place and I'll think of these characters when I look out of my windows.

A wonderfully crafted tale, and the sailing details are very good:-).

ThIs was a Beautifully paced story and I adored both characters. Truly worthy of 5 stars!

That was a brilliantly told story that had everything, lonliness, sadness, laughter, joy, love and sex, I'm a straight guy but i just thought your description of the sex scenes were amazing and made me rock hard.

Seriously well done and thank you. x

Another brilliant and delightful tale. Thoroughly enjoyable. Thank you.

I'm trying to read all the good sailing stories on Lit that I can find. Found this, not a lot on sailing, but turned into a really nice love story. I feel it also needs a follow up chapter to let us know how the sisters fair. Thank you for this one.

Really beautiful love story with really believable sex! The emotion and physicality is excellent.

Your use of language is wonderful. A pleasure to read.

You obviously know sailing as well as the South Coast!

I was not aware of many Americanisms but as someone brought up on US films, TV and authors I am pretty used to them and so they did not jump out at me. People who grew up in the early days of the mobile Revolution do sometimes use cellphone. I occasionally use it myself. So not sure where the complaint comes from.

I agree there needs to be a sequel.

... with a dildo larger than you are? Assuming you're a man, and I'm fairly certain you are.

Tell me after you've seen that if they can fuck or not.

I'd bet they'll disagree with you.

Did you enjoy the story? I sure did.

But if it's not your thing, don't read it. And don't bother with a comment.

What appears to be an English story, has a few Americanisms thrown in that make it feel wrong. for instance, using the word 'cellphone'. Nobody in the UK uses that word, ever.

I got the feeling that the author is American, trying to appear English. An American might not notice, but an Englishman would.

Well, at this time of night with a couple of glasses of wine in me I can't be specific about why I like this story. But I really liked it. Usually, I would quit reading as soon as I discovered that it was a girl on girl story, but I had to keep reading this one. I'm just not going to over analyse it. I'll just like it and be happy. I would love to see a sequel. (Oops, guess I should check the author page before saying that. There might already be one.)

Please keep writing and thanks for the great read!

Several of my favorite topics mixed wonderfully into a single story. So wonderfully written and worth every delicious second of reading. Truly a beautiful story.

Very sweet... very, very nice wordplay with the title. :-)

My only criticism would be that Em never gets fully developed as a character in the same way Bella does – but then again; making a grown man empathise enough with Bella to cry two or three times through the reading of the story makes up for that detraction quite nicely, thank you.

Such a deep moving story, could be a mini novel, your descriptive terminology is second to none.

The build up, the dark secret love held comes out little by little to a grand finale.

I honestly believe this is worth 10*

Congratulations, first class of the highest order

Thankyou :)

I can only add my voice to the crowd - excellent worldbuilding, deep and realistic characters, believable plot.

Yes, there are no twists or surprises and the finale is as classic as ever, but that goes by the side when you get lost in the story. Thank you for writing it.

A wonderfully painful story to anyone who feels alone. Bravo!

Your writing is captivating, I look for your stories every visit and this is no exception. Beautiful love story, and excellent technical writing too.

"Why did you never tell me you like girls? It could have been something for us to share, before we were able to share this. "

Just loved this story and it is two sisters makes it MORE erotic!It is VERY VERY romantic. wish I had met two sisters like that! I wish I was Emma's BF. and as Isobel asked it is difficult for a girl like Emma to describe hetero penetration I wish the author writes a sequel where Emma has a new BF , a mature one and she gently makes him agree to both her and Isobel being lesbians and how Isobel needs to be taught what a cock feels like as it penetrates her pussy lips ! Wont I just be happy to take on that role and let Emma gently be there to comfort and encourage and hold and while Isobel gets gently tenderly and Lovingly fucked for the first time! No Harm in dreaming! Of course I live in United Kingdom and no other girl can bet a true English Rose!

Even if this were your only hit, and it is far from that, I would still judge you one of the best based on this story alone.

Excellent read!

Wonderful!

MG335/346

Well written. You definitely know how to make a story flow as well as you know your way around a sailboat. Keep up the good work.

That was incredible. So heartfelt and genuine; the characters not only felt truly real, but it felt as though I was inextricably linked to Isabel, as though through some shared bond her experiences became my own.

I cried a little bit, a welling up of emotion deep in my throat when I got to the part where Isabel admits the depths of her loneliness to Emma. It is a rare artwork that is capable of such a feat, and I sincerely applaud you for it, OneHitWanda.

I liked the depth of relationship and connection in the story. I'm not quick to vote or comment but o my, I had to say that I loved this story.

Awesome well set story. I love that I know what's going to happen from the beginning and you deliver in grand fashion.

The way you described the depth of their feelings and their frustration at not being able to share that with each other was touching. This story reveals how siblings can truly love each other if they open their hearts, even if it is not sexual. Thank you for the hard work and insightful "wordsmithing". A beautiful tale.

Although we always knew the end of the story, you beautifully presented the "build up" without a coarse word. Even the final act was presented without resorting to "catch phrase" pornographic language or images. The images were painted in our minds well before they occurred. Great story!

Drew me in and the story sustained its charm throughout. Amazingly well crafted. The love between the sisters was also believable and well presented. I wish I could write as well as you do.

Per ad astra. Thanks for sharing! 5*

Too angsty, and a few places the prose becomes a tad too purple for my taste

You really are a brilliant writer. You put so much feeling into your descriptions.

I just cannot get enough of your stories - so I do hope you continue and write many more.

But just want to express my gratitude here and now for what you written so far - thank you !

Very very well done.

This is the very FIRST English English Novel I actually was able to get through. Add to that it was a Lesbian story, which I rarely if ever get through gives this story and its' writer very high praise. This was a very good read.

I've never been a fan of lesbian stories in general, and lesbian incest stories in particular, but this..............masterpiece is just incredible!

If I could give you a score of 100, I would!

The gentle lead up, the sense of history between them just made their eventual love-making that much more............believable?.................genuine?

I don't know, I just know that I LOVE this story!

Thank you ;)

A superbly crafted, beautifully written story. The story flows flawlessly, and you are a superb wordsmith. You create the mood, and the image of safety, comfort, shelter and finally being at home in the womb of the boat on the stormy sea but in safe harbor is priceless. Please keep writing, I love your stories.

I loved every moment of this...spot on and very well written, so much so in point of fact I forgot what I was reading and just enjoyed the story....lovely just lovely and thank goodness for being a fellow pirate...cheers!

A beautiful story--lovely, luscious, well-written, sensuous and engaging. The details really pulled me into the tale. It would be wonderful to follow these two on some of their trips and adventures. (Well, at least wonderful for me . . .) Greece and Iceland, and who-knows-where next?

It's a great stand-alone story, but I adore the characters. Thank you so much for sharing Isabel and Emma.

PygmyCoho