All Comments on 'Near Vacation Ch. 01'

I sure hope that this is not the end and it's going in the direction I thinl.

Good beginning. Thanks for writing. Real incest always has negative consequences; hopefully you wont hestiate to put those in as well.

Lets see, his name is Robert. He has the same birthday as Shelly. And it sounds like he is an "only child". Do I see a twist coming where this is a trip to let him know that Roberta is actually his mother? Nice story. Can't wait to see where it goes.

I like the story, but...too "Wham-Bam-Thank You, Ma'am" for my taste...& some odd errors here and there...

On to the next chapter...benefit of the doubt...

Good job!

Good job!