All Comments on 'Neat N' Naked 01: Athena'

Good pace and the sex scenes was great.

Decent story :) However, you occasionally jump between third person and first person for Athena. It’s distracting

Great story! Who cares if you jump from third to first perso.

Disastrous conjunction of first and third person , even in the same sentence! You may have good story ideas but you must get an editor !

The constant use of first person really distracts from a pretty good story!

Basic concept ok.

However desperately needs editing, particularly to keep to either first OR third person perspective. At the moment it's too confusing and annoying.

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