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All Comments on 'Neighbors - The Beach Trip Ch. 02'

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mybikecruisesmybikecruisesover 3 years ago
Great fun sex story BUT

The biggest problem you had, you couldn't keep your characters with the right people. Kerri was in the bedroom Alice, Terry was shopping with Reba, Kerri came out of the bedroom tasting if Reba.

Terry was in bed with his wife Krissy.

Great fun sex story but get an editor

flipnmelonfarmerflipnmelonfarmerover 3 years agoAuthor

MBC - Good catch! Thanks for the feedback - always appreciated.

laughdruidlaughdruidover 3 years ago
5 Stars

loved the ending and the story, you do not need an editor but get any one else to read before submitting. A fresh pair of eyes will usually catch what you miss.

DunkirkDunkirkover 3 years ago

Reba and alice should have a momento of their vacation to take home-a baby bump

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4/22/2024 - I've spent the last few months writing on Medium as Anton J Pierce. Mostly writing about writing (erotica) but also a couple of short fiction pieces that will make their way to this platform. First (The Birthday Gift) should be out in the next couple of days. Hope ...