All Comments on 'Neighbours Pt. 02'

I think I like this one better, and hope you continue it soon. Mom surely can't be any more immune to Sam's charms than Dad. But good luck on your other story.

What did you prefer in this chapter? The fuck? Thr variety? I'm not soliciting comments but reasons help me plan sequels or other stories. Mum has always preferred Sam's sister, who likes girls. Nicola might turn out to be bi. Harry will be taking Sam back after Christmas. Should I develop Ann-Marie's character? Three in a bed? (Maybe a bit cramped) And the noises of Sam's passion might arouse curiosity (and by god she could waken the dead) elsewhere on the house. What might bring my story the red 'H' that's so far evading me?

I got the sense of a real person in this chapter, interacting with other real people.

Excellent work. Look forward to more.

I must agree though. If something else calls you to write it, heed that call.

Will eagerly be waiting for you're next offering.

ES

Love this story, but please proofread before submitting - just to pick up the number of glaring word errors.

Look forward to more though.

Re: Proofread. If you took the time to understand that I'm trying to portray someone whose first language isn't English you might realise this HAS been proofed.

PRETTY PLEASE, WRITE SOME MORE!