All Comments on 'Nemesis'

hoping there will be a sequel to this

Long but flowed smoothly, a continuation would be wonderful . Sexy, sensual and intense, yet not in a demeaning manner, enjoyed it as a women.

Just awesome

Great story and awesome writing! I really hope there's going to be a sequel to this!

One suggestion, have the narrator set up cameras to capture the action. It felt unrealistic that he would have the dexterity to snap pictures with his phone during the intense action.

Sequel plz

It was a breathtaking story. Would love if you add a sequel.

Good story ruined by the excessive amounts of participle sentences.

This coulda been a masterpiece if you'd just built Holly alittle bit more. Every piece of characterisation is given in second hand, which sucks because it distances the reader from her.

The entire story is centripetal to the relationship between her and him, specifically he's feelings of hate and craving for revenge, but we've barely felt any of that.

Its disappointing because you seem really talented, its legitimately the only flaw i had with a story, the problem is that its a very big flaw. Its like there's this hole right in the middle of the narrative where h

Holly should have existed, she feels like a functional side character at best, and yet its her story.

Regardless though thanks for sharing the piece.

NB: A rewrite from Holly's perspective would instantly fix this. But yeah, just my opinion.

Masterpiece. Sequel please!