by jmcidlv15
finally read the other parts. it had it's moments, but overral i didn't enjoy it. or at least enjoyed it less than your other story.
as you always should(well, not really always but you get it). oh, so she wasn't the mc? my bad uce. i saw it before, idk why i didn't read it back then, but i will now.
I write what I like, and she becomes more of a supporting character going forward. Next few chapters are posted on the link above
this one was straight up evil. you really need to work more on your mc's, they always seems to be the villains instead. tho this is just the first part so i still can't say for sure what/feel i think about it.
I have the next two parts posted on my deviant art page: https://www.deviantart.com/jmcidlv15
You just might get your wish ;)