by homerdepot
The writing is dull, the male character is an asshole who would never get laid irl. The author uses the same 3 phrases over and over. He needs a thesaurus.
All of you people giving this person derogatory comments give them too much credit. At this point in their writing career, it's obvious they have absolutely no intention of becoming a writer.
Tell them the truth: they have zero skill or talent, and should stop humiliating themselves by publishing their garbage anywhere. The simple act of them stringing words together is a total waste of their time and the people unfortunate enough to read it.
The tone of this story was all wrong for me. I did give you 4*s, but...
This is the first of your stories that I have read, I'll try one more...