by recklessorgasm
It is best to use as much dialogue as possible, rather than just narrative, as you do here. It makes the story more life-like.
You need to move on quickly from huge cocks and tits. If you continue their story let them show more inventiveness. UK CYNIC.
Need dialogue, and no reaction by either to the changes at the end?
Too tired, will explore later? They are supposed to have
high sexual drives.
The female ejaculation is a tad overdone at times.
Other thing that's puzzling, no oral sex at all?
Otherwise, a good story so far in the BEA tradition.