All Comments on 'Night of Fun'

My only comment would be to really pay attention to your spelling mistakes or replacing one word with another. It was distracting to an otherwise PERFECT story!. I'd like to hear the back story of these two and see where it goes from here. Great Job.

I think the largest problem would be the few spelling and/or grammatical errors. Other than that minuscule problem, it's great, so keep up the good work :)

A great story, I really love how she just wanted him in her so badly and didn't waste time giving him oral sex once she was so in need. I wish more detail could be given on describing their act of sex because it sounds like such a good time!