All Comments on 'Night Out'

For the read.

Your story starts off well but ends rather abruptly. There was also no continuity at the end. Since Jenna went to school with the main character, she obviously wasn’t Sharon in disguise... so how did Sharon get in the room let alone know which room this guy was in? Is there some link between Sharon and Jenna?

Your writing needs some work; it’s almost as if you were in a hurry to finish writing your story and not caring much about the content.

Huge feeling of emptiness in the ending. Needs to be finished. The why and results are a drag.

Thaanks. Did you plan for an ending? It ends abruptly and i am curious how you resolve it.