All Comments on 'Nightime Temptation'

The concept of the story was good, though a little hard to believe at times. You definitely need to reread your stories before you submit them as they are a little messed up still.

Though it was a little erotic, it wasnt mind blowing.

Look forward to next story, and the improvements you make.

That was one hot story! I can't wait to read more.

Though editing would help, the premise of the story is good. Please continue with this storyline.

This is nearly a verbatum story of how it happened for me the first time

that was pretty damn hot although it would've been better if you had incorperated a little more struggle into it i mean no girl who's a virgin at that is just going to let that happen she'd struggle a little at least but other than that so hot need to write more though longer filled with more i'll be watching for more from you hopefully about the same kinda things

YOU PERVERT!

I couldn't get past the first paragraph!

I think you should write more please!!!

Please have your stories edited in the future... so many run-on sentences and such that I couldn't even read your story

Hot as helllllll

*gush* so hot!! Make her pregnant and sure she carries it to term and use her as your cow

good job can't wait for more

It became unarousing when I realized the entire story was three run on sentences separated by indents and spacing. I couldn't even focus on the story.

Just a tease.

Hated it!

Hot you NEED to follow up WITH THIS!!! HOPE YOU DO GET HER PREGNANT!!! HOT

Get an editor. Horrible grammar and punctuation. Sentences don't go on and on.

And the story? Really? No young lady is going to lay there while you forcibly take her virginity.