All Comments on 'Nine Months Too Long a Wait'

Hypocrisy much? Your woman is a cunt so you're a bigger one... Ain't nobody standing on the high ground in this story.

I liked it all the way up to before he became a total scumbag by helping his friends rape a his ex-mother-in-law. Then he just became an even more disgusting human being than the rest the dumbshits in this story combined, by a mile.

I like the story a lot. AAAA+++

The story is great. Some comments are as well. Invisible_bridges gave her gender away [read her comments] and should be named invisible_britches due to those comments. Then, of course, there is not_a honest_viking, not acknowledging that the main scumbags are her family, Randy and those two best buddies. LP

What the fuck?!? The bitch cheated and you have the cuck following his duck.

BULLSHIT!

Well done, except: "It was a perverse way to look at it, but she did have a point." How could you write that? She had no point at all. If you marry a woman who already has a child, you are not raising a child that represents a profound betrayal of you and your wedding vows. Suppose your wife steals a Mercedes, and you divorce because of it. Then you plan to marry a woman who bought a Mercedes. Would the ex have a point if she said, "Why not stay married to me? You are still going to be married to a woman with a Mercedes if you marry her."? That one line made the MC appear stupid beyond belief. Still a 5, but what a ridiculous unforced error.

Excellent story, these pussies who didn’t like what happened to the mother-in-law and Ralph can eat a turd! The mother-in-law had a conceptual gang bang so no foul! While Ralph should be taking a handgun safety course!

Excellent revenge story! Cucold Kees the upper hand throughout the story. I would just like to have seen a remorse scene from Traci.

Even conceding that she was horny and thought that he was cheating, she couldn't use birth control, especially during her fertile periods?

3 stars and only because he divorced the skanky, slut.

Good one....loved the payback on the bitch mother in law.

Sorry but this bird don’t fly. First, you created a story with too many people who do not deserve a shred of compassion. Also it might have been a better story if you had taken the time to do a better job of proof reading and not relied on auto correct spelling: ewe no watt eye meant. There were also tense changes in the same paragraph and some acts that made everything sound dumb. Why would a man who is getting a divorce from a cheating wife who is pregnant from another man want to have oral or normal sex with her? No, better take some time to think your plot lines and character actions better for your next effort.

He forgave her infidelity, thereby altering the division of assets to 50/50. In the law, when you have sex with someone after their infidelity, it is seen as forgiveness for that infidelity.

On a side note, he fucked her after everything she did? Eww. Loser deserves to get dick rot from the skank for that.

You know, if someone doesn't like the story that's their problem. You did a good job on the story. I just hate the pompous grammar police who pontificate and try to show how smart they are. That person didn't even have the courage to use a name. He should slink back to his mother's basement to jerk off to this story Again

No revenge on his " buddies " ? Don't make any more of your characters Marines; you don't have the slightest fucking clue!

whta a joke, cucky tale fairy tale author maybe

WEAK WIMP CUCK MARINE. CRYING OVER A CHEATING SKANK WIFE THEN HEAD IN THE CLOUDS WITH THE DIVORCE LAWYER!! NO REVENGE ON HIS FRIENDS!!

REALL A CUCK MARINE, AS A MARINE HE IS A DISGRACE

So many people anonymously spew their filth over free stories. Hell, it's a FREE (NO COST) literary site.

Finally a story where everyone got what they deserved.

Might as well be a saddletramp story for all the bullshit small dick incel bullshit

Great end run.

good "Premise" for a stry "Ace" but not technically worthwhile

This story was good up to fucking his ex-wife and licking her fucking cunt? What the fuck is wrong with you

Loved the story. But for me personally having sex with the soon to be ex, especially eating her pussy was a bit much. If day lead the bitch on and walk away....but that's just me

Couldn’t happen to a nicer group. They still got off to easy. So many whorehouses around the world and whole family of volunteers. Such a waste. They could have really done something worthwhile instead of wasting oxygen here. Oh well, such is life.

The whole “cheating wife, marries the divorce lawyer“ trope is so ignorant and overused. What kind of a moron would be in the middle of divorcing his wife for infidelity and be immediately wanting to hit on the next attractive female character he sees. Your main character is a caricature, a ball of rage with a dick. No subtlety, just venom and resentment.

Your inclusion of the particular female caricatures you selected shows clearly that you, 1) Really hate women as people; and 2) Don’t understand them well enough to write female characters with any veracity at all.

You (Author) read a bunch of LW stories, and have focused only on the ones that really push your “hate all the fucking bitches” buttons. You have correctly surmised that churning out an endless series of copycat “stories” will net you praise from all the “He-Man Woman-Haters” and trolls that nest here.

Let me leave you with a constructive comment. You are currently starting with a plot, and inventing characters to make that (worn-out) plot function. Instead, try imagining your characters as real people with real feelings. Now try imagining what they will actually do, given their personalities and circumstances.

At least that way, you won’t just be throwing rotten meat to the scavengers.

I lost IQ points reading this.

If his military background was top secret,how could the police refer to it.?

Babalooie, dude we expect some integrity as a writer and there was none found here. Regardless of free or paying big bucks, someone should have pride enough in their work to not put out trash like this one. Good grief, defending this imbicile is not one of your better traits.

1 star - just a stupid story

Nice read, I liked the style, character set, and idea

Lost total credibility after the drugging of the mother-in-law.

I don't want to nitpick, but in most states, having sex with the wife after learning of her infidelity amounts to condonation of the adultery and nullifies it as a grounds for divorce. Just sayin'

Amusing tale, but like another commenter said, having sex with the soon-to-be Ex before the dissolution would actually complicate things in this instance. And it would also require a DNA or other paternity test for the in-utero child so would probably end up waiting until the birth. So, a bit too contrived.

Army cuck could not fuck his wife after 9 months so he was eyeballing the lawyer!!

THIS WRITER IS ONE SCREWED UP ASSHOLE

Cute pp 5*. By the way, why do you allow anonymous comments; they're mostly from assholes.

I'm one of those anonymous commenters, and only comment when something is interesting. I'm still active in the academy, albeit near retirements, and call me a coward. But I don't disrespect authors and that goes for both Hooked1957 and imhapless. Great authors, both of you. Right up there with Richard Gerald and other notables.

Who is this Traci that keeps showing up in your stories......seems like she did a number on you..... However, whatever..... Love your writings

You've obviously never been in the military Hooked. A three man special unit? That's not how things work. I know this, because I was a field combat hospital corpsman and served four years with the U.S.M.C.

Really? She wants to get a table to have dinner and talk? The only response should be FUCK OFF BITCH!

Dancing? Why doesn't he bend over and ask to get fucked?

I'm very disappointed in the way this story progressed.

As soon as he accepted "service" from her he approves of her actions!

4 stars. This could easily have been a 5 star amazing story, but failed on a couple of points:

1. The slut won in the end. She ended up married to rich guy AND allowed to fuck around. Losing some money in divorce was good for main character's morale, but ultimately amounted to little meaningful difference.

2. Shitty "mother" in law wasn't punished at all. Having a gangbang wasn't a negative for her, clearly. So the only one punished was - if he found out - was her husband, not her. She wasn't meaningfully harmed in any way possible but deserved it.

4. The idiotic behavior with soon to be ex with dinner, dancing etc... was... well, idiotic. As other said, at least it could have risked good divorce outcome. I'll let that slide since he effectively got minor revenge on both her and the asswipe, but till, dumb move.

5. Related to #3, the whole subplot with the old whore made no sense. If he wanted an aliby, there were way simpler ways to get one. As I said, it definitely wasn't any revenge on HER. So what's the point other than have his military buddy risk picking up an STD from her?

"The third child"

Druging mother and shooting his balls off drops story to 4*.

Distrupts the reader's sense of MC being a ethical man.

I was with you until you had your main character fall in love with the next woman he sees, his new lawyer. That’s just such a stupid, tired, childish cliché.

No one with a working brain can take this seriously. You fucktards constantly write the same unbelievable story over and over, depending on the stupidity of your audience to rescue you.

There’s a special place in hell for anyone who cheats on a deployed spouse. Well handled.

The premise of a deployed service member being cheated on in the manner the story described had great promise for an excellent story. However, after it's premise the story became one example of stupidity after another. For starters, having the MC and his slut wife be located in a small Southeast city makes no sense when they both attended the Univ of Iowa. Then having his two best friends also attend college in Iowa was weird. When he came home from deployment, he flew into Nashville with a two hour drive home. Logic says he lived in Tennessee or perhaps northern Alabama or maybe north Mississippi. Have him go to a southern school. 2) He rents a car at Nashville airport but has a truck the next day. Did he trust his future ex to return the car? 3) He is so moral about his wedding vows but drugs his ex mother-in-law and gets his ex's husband's balls shot off. He is no more moral than his ex's wacky family. 4) the timeline has him getting his pharmaceutical degree in 3 years. No way that happens, especially after his break from school while serving in the Marines. 5) the mother-in-law and her family are too stupid for even Literotica characters. With their attitude toward military personnel and casual sexual affairs (blatantly expressed to him when he first met them), there is no way a moral man with half a brain would have married Traci. 6) meeting the ex mother-in-law might have been a plausible alibi, but sticking around after drugging her and until she sobered enough to recognize him was absurd 7) the way the story developed, the MC and his military buddies are simply thugs, not patriots. It was an insult to Special Operations of all branches. 8) the list could go on and on. Interesting premise for a story that was butchered.

The last line of the story has Traci's third baby being named Phil. Was this meant to indicate that Traci had regret about losing Phil as her husband, or was it a hint that Phil cheated on his current wife and fathered a baby with his ex?

Highly unlikely that a .22 would blow a man's balls and dick off. So the idea that Randy can't father more children is not a given.

Lot of unlikable characters. Having the mother in law drugged and raped is gross. Then Randy has his balls blown off. High moral standards. And yes Traci and her family are morons. And screwing his two ex best friends to.keep things quiet was execrable. Only his future wife seemed like a moral person.

The only person with morals is his shark of a lawyer, damn but the Marines will take anybody. No, they won't. I had to brothers join the Marines. They are very upstanding people. I'm a discharged Ranger, the things I did are under the heading of National Security for the next 175 years. Do I care, nope. My ex family hate me. Both my sons hated me, but joined anyway. The sandbox caught them. 1 in Iraq, the other in Afghanistan. I say this because when I divorced their mother for desertion I got 85% of everything thanks to a former Marine JAG, now a circuit court judge. He hated people who disrespected veterans.

Painful. Like an IED backstabbing you.

Mona; 'taming of the Shrew?'

Randy; 'jody dickless groddy' papa smirk

Traci; 'like riding a bicycle again and again'

Too bad there wasn't more revenge on the cheating wife and no information regarding the fallout from the cheating mother,

Pulls a gun on him and threatens him and all he does is swat it out of his hand? No ass kicking?

The anonymus comment 7 month earlier "The premise of a deployed service member..." contains all the points I intended to make and then some👍

Phil is dumb as a box of rocks, even more so than the typical Hocked1957 male "hero". He is ignoring his future wife's past "I don't have to know what you did before we met"- BIG mistake. He doesn't care about her family background, the attitude of her parents and sibling, the influence they have on Traci. The strong ties between her former longtime boyfriend with said family and his being around whenever they visited contributed to the number of red flags dangling in his tace. He begged for disaster by marrying this "goddess" and cried and bitched when this idiotic "project" went belly up. How does good old Phil react? He perpetrates crimnil acts effectively turning his band of brothers into a gang to exert revenge. Boy, he had nothing else to blame for the disaster his married life had turned into than his own stupidity. So divorce her and lern from the experience. What does he do? Marries another woman after knowing her for one (!) year (not counting the time she acted as his lawyer). SMH

Just wondering........ do you perchance have an ex wife called Traci who was a cheating slut? If so you have my condolences it happened to me by my first wife too while I was asleep upstairs.

This author is a creampie eating cuckold right wing nut job. All of his MC's a weak little cunts.

Note to the "author"...please do us a favor and stop writing.