All Comments on '"No Big Deal"'

I should have been able to read such a short story but the lack of capitalization where expected made it surprisingly difficult to read; but then, I never liked e e cummings anyway.

Needs to be continued where they fuck

Learn the rules of capitalization and follow them.

Find an editor.

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The story had potential, but was just too hard to read.

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PS: Learn to use tags.

I think it was a great story idea, I wouldn't put to much into the complaints. If they were real pen names, you could confirm they can write better than they complain about free stories. Would live to see where this goes.

Really difficult to read.

Nah; really misses the mark, Karmon. Same old mix of tenses which serve only as a distraction. Less than average, sorry.

Where's the rest of it?

Poor punctuation and verb symmetry make this very difficult to read.