All Comments on 'No Cake'

Now if Mary left for overseas with Kurt and needed her passport wouldn't her passport have had her married name on it... did not Kurt ever see that and get suspicious about that?... and how about when you are romancing someone don't you take them out on dates in the evening?... Mary could not do that because of the kids... was Kurt a complete idiot?... and another biggy... that ring indentation doesn't just go away when you take you rings off... its there loud and clear to give away your deception and any fool would know that.

I think that it is complete. People who want every t crossed an i dotted are just lazy and have no imagination.

How bizarre, no way would she have gone to a wedding with her husband knowing what could happen. She would have gone alone.

That was amazing. It really puts to shame all the other writers out here who are doing so much trash on this website - or it would, if they had any shame. So much time wasted, compared to somebody who can write this. Well done.

Finish the f****n story!!!

I don't get it.

Well done.

Sigh......some of y'all need imagination. Based on ages one would conjure Mary was/is married to Michael. Had two girls. Had an affair with Kurt. Married Kurt before becoming pregnant with (His)/Their Mary.

No indication of Michael divorcing her, but one might assume it occurred under "Abandonment". There is no mention of Michael getting re-married although one could conjure/imagine he did so.

Mary heard/read about the up coming marriage of her daughter and decided to 'sneak' in.

Now she's stuck with bigamy, passing off her third daughter as Kurt's.

Oh we see a lot of legal issues, daughters donning camo gear and coming unglued.

Or maybe some of you might see a poly family. (Yeah not).

Masterful. I was never lost and hung on every word. Great economy in this human tragedy.

I see Rimmerdal (two comments earlier) tripped over the "premature-assumption"-trap that Kurt (Michael's ex-wife's runaway lover/new"hubbby") was the bio-dad of Mary-Junior II, & had missed the "dominant Steel-grey eyes with black outlines" that MICHAEL had passed on to all THREE of his daughters, -bride Kim (then 12) Mary Junior (then 6), and of course, the THEN embryo of two months gestation growing rapidly within Mother Mary's womb, at the time she ran off from Michael, with Kurt, perhaps herself not knowing the paternity of her embryo!

Too abrupt an end - waste of time reading an incomplete story

DickSnugfit.

Yep I miss wrote that. I wanted to go that road but my brain made a left turn at...........well you know. Thank you for pointing that out.

It is such a rich story for the length. Works the brain well.

You packed alot into your 2800 words. Impressive and engaging. I'd love to see this fleshed out to a full story, but as a short it stands well as it is.

Very interesting read. I think the wife had brass balls, to show up at the wedding uninvited. Especially without trying to get together with her girls and ex- husband first. That was a very interesting twist. I do believe, that most women would not have wanted this to be a surprise at the wedding. This tells me ex wifey had mental problems, for sure. 5 stars.

Very enjoyable read. Definitely needs a second chapter. You packed a lot onto this short story. Now to expand on the original

Wonderful true Short Story. Utterly complete. Sadly not enough of those on Lit. Five hypernovas; maybe six.

arguably the BEST first story ever in the LW genre

Good, short and sweet

What a story. It's always kind of saatisfyin when the former reaizes dhe relly screwed up.

Good, but I'd have liked to see some of the resulting time period. This feels abandoned in the middle of rising action, with no conclusion.

Ooooooh ! That hurt !

Hasselbeck either

a) can't count,

or

b) was already screwing Mary Sr. before she divorced Michael.

Whichever, he deserves what he got.

So why did she go with her new husband to the wedding? Obviously it would all come out.

Excellent

Possibly the most savage one ive read yet

Very well done.

Amazing. Should be rated higher

Deserves a higher rating. Engaging.

The writer said and explained much with few words. Great short story.

Concentrated and crystallized. Very powerful and impactful. Thank you.

Well done! Excellent story.

Good story well written but why would she take her second husband to the wedding, it was all bound to come out.

One Of A Very,

Very few times after reading a story where I wished for more. *****'s Signed: BTW

What happened next!?

Wow. Fucking fantastic

They’d already swapped business cards, so he didn’t need to insist on his phone number. Why would she turn up at the wedding when it was sure to blow up. But the worst thing was that she wore WHITE to a wedding.

I need more

I'm not reading these in order of posting so sorry if I repeat myself.

I love the way you have written a deeply thoughtful story, nice how you put a lot of feeling in it without a lot of the BTB writing that is on here, YET you knock it on the head on BTB still.

Some stories are just fun. Some stories are just sad. Some are funny.

Very few are as potent as this one. Very well done.

Brutal. 5 stars.

This was a deep, hard hitting story that really showed how selfish some people can be. They are without remorse aside from there own feelings and just as soon run you over instead of taking the time to drive around you.

Read again. Damn good.

Mannnnn; freaking fantastic!

2nd read: My gosh did Mary Sr. open a Pandora's box in attending her eldest daughters wedding.

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BUT "will Mike get to see his youngest daughter lil-Mary and will she get to meet her two sisters? Will Mike press bigamy to gain custody of his youngest?

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Until that moment Mike never knew he had a 3rd daughter.

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This yearns for a sequel-part2, without, a whole drop in rating pts.

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3.9**** hooyah

OMG! AMAZING first story! *****

Read this a while back, and just read it again. Gave it a 5 then, giving it a 5++ now.

Brutality can be a beautiful thing

@KRD19254"

>>>Michael stopped, took a deep breath, and composed himself.

"Then we found out she was almost two months pregnant, with our third." Michael said, looking off into the distance.<<<

Mike knew.

Brilliant story, excellent timing and pacing and construction. Very well done in a very concise way. And a perfect ending. A nice breath of reality in a generally screwed up and twisted website.

I spent the first half of the story wondering why they invited her to just destroy her. I get the need, but not at your daughter's wedding. Once I read "did you see the invite", I understood. Great story.

Superb story telling. No one wasted or unnecessary word.

LA

While I like it, I’m honestly more interested in Kurt’s reaction.

I like the portayal of Kurt. He seems to be an okay guy who doesn't know his wife's history since she deceits him from the beginning of their relationship. More likely, Kurt wouldn't have married her if he knew.

like most halfway decent stories this one has a major plot hole everyone wants to ignore

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she knew she had burned her bridges, why show up uninvited?

Hit and run! 5FAV

Stone cold 5 stars!!

Even though there would not be a story without it, lujon2019 nailed it pointing out the major story flaw. Loss of a star for that.

Cold hearted bitch. 5 stars DMW aka Sumnut96

To those asking "Why show up at all?", I think the provided story shows a woman with serious, maybe even dangerous mental issues. It is, to me, no stretch that she "reasoned" she'd be welcome at the wedding, or at least forgiven. She was cold-hearted, but she was also self-enabling and clearly created her own reality and rules.

Powerful stuff. Even the second time around. I really wish the follow up had dealt more with the Father, daughters and second husband but that's life. Mary needed some serious help that she obviously never got.

Good, well constructed story, full marks for this one.

Really good. I would have liked more. In answer to lujon2019 - I don't know of ANY woman that wouldn't want to see, in person, her daughter get married. Invited or not.

I reckon Mary has a bit of explaining to do.

why show up? because it was still her daughter and she must have regreted what she did and deep down inside is sorry and probably in pain for what she did and would do anything to have a do over

Regret or not its too late dont come back I have no sympathy for the cunt ex wife, bitch went missing when they needed her most.

Excellent story. Well written.