All Comments on 'No Longer Your Teacher'

by ADonovan

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AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Too short, not believable, no emotional connection... needs work. Your whole process needs work. Think, put some work into your stories; you may surprise yourself. Good luck!

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Just rushed nonsense

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

anal ruined it, despite the fact it wouldn't have been much better even without it in this case, as it's rushed, badly thought out, and no real reason for a reader to become invested in any either character, especially the closeted beta.

amiinwienamiinwienover 1 year ago

Good start but you lost me at the butt plug. There is no way to eat a woman to orgasm and not notice a buttplug. Or maybe there is, but I love anal so much there is no way I wouldn't notice.

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I'm a 19 amateur writer from Hungary. I'm trying to improve my writing. If you want your fantasy written please reach out to me at: justbecause4990@gmail.com I'm sure we can work something out.