All Comments on 'Nobody Wants An Old Man'

..this story have given me a headache. what's a 'devoice'?

The plot is good. the story line has promise.

What is lousey?! Why don't you learn how to spell you dumbshit! Go back to skool!

Needs a lot of help. The typos are rampant, the style erratic and I'm sure there's a plot in there somewhere, if only I were motivated to go back and look for it. At least try to proofread your prose and weed out the worst of the blunders before you hand it off to an editor.

You need help formatting the story, with word usage, and with spelling. All told I have read stories on here by what is called "good authors" that are much worse. Keep on going. An editor would help you immensely.

I scored you low because of the poor spelling. Not a bad story, though.

in the child that teh husband had. I am assuming used in this context that the father got pregnant, and birthed his son.

Try for an editor. The spelling was a major turn off and the plot did not make up for the number of errors

but the spelling keeps causing us to trip up at the

worst times---

Don't write the next chapter until you get a better editor and and better spell checker.

The bones are there for a decent story but the spelling and grammar mistakes glare at me so much that I lost the thread of the story. Don't give up, look to your problems and make the story "flow".

Regards John C

Way too slow of a start to hold my interest. I gave up half way through the first page.

Get either a dictionary or a spell checker!

That was a total waste of time.

read your work backwards, From all the comments, ya you need some work done. Read the story, then when you read it backwards, what you are doing is tricking your brain. Brains are lazy bastards, it thinks I just wrote this, of course it is ok and sails right errors. once you have read it backwards reread it to make sure your story is still there and the brain will pay better attention.

back when they had real newspapers, this is what the professional proofreaders would do.

Getting someone to help is not a problem, most I know of from here on this site will not charge you.

you showed some good instincts Keep up your work and remember all the assholes telling you to get help have never published anything.