All Comments on 'Not Bible Camp Ch. 02'

might have been interesting without the gaps in the download pages

I've gone through the original document on my laptop and the one showing on Literotica and, except for one teeny little typo, they match completely.

Now, it is true the narration may come off as jumbled. My narrator just writes off the top of his head and sometimes he gets things in rigid chronological order, but his mind tends to go all over the place, especially if he's upset about something. You either get into the experience of his fumbling attempt to make sense of his situation and his conflicted feelings, or you don't.

And I should add that there's almost no chance of making sense of Part 2 without Part 1. Sorry if I didn't make that clear.

Oddly edge of your seat stuff; I can’t wait to read more!

the one scene that you mentioned with his dream of getting the two girls pregnant. It would be interesting to get him tell the counsler about it.

Really loving this story.