All Comments on 'Not So Innocent'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
Nice buildup

That cannot be the ending !!!!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
Consistency

You start out your story referring to the boss as J.P. and then midway through the story you call him P. J. You need to proofread and be consistent with your character's names.

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