All Comments on 'Nothing Wrong'

Nice to read

The English is not readable

Very hard to read. You really need someone to proofread the story and tidy it up. 1*

Unfortunately there were far to many mistakes to carry on reading.

Either you need to proof read it before putting it on this site, or get someone else to proof read it for you.

Could be a good story but you need an editor. Many times you put he where it should have been she.

Part 2?

I'm thinking there is a big gap in translation. He and she keeps getting interchanged. And you changed her age after the first paragraph. But the plot , not too bad.

I dont know if you would pass an english exam but i hope theres a followup to this story :)

First, the excuse that you live in a country where English isn't spoken is not an excuse. You made the decision to submit something in a language you knew you are not fluent in.

This submission is horrible. Submit only in a language you are fluent in. There are many categories for different languages. Put your garbage in one of those categories.

I can't even comment on the story itself. I couldn't stand to read it all the way through.

I think you've been unfairly criticised in some respects. While it is obvious that English is not your first language you still wrote an interesting story. You really should consider getting an editor who can help you with a better choice of words sometimes, and your sentence structure. I enjoyed the story, it has lots of potential, and I think it deserves a second chapter. Don't give up, we all have to learn sometime.

A good story, needs a bit of help with the editing.

Love the concept and the urgency to the story

I can see two reasons for this being so bad it barely makes sense and the bits that do are almost funny.

1: It was written by an AI and uploaded without proofreading

2: It was written in another language and run through a translator worse than Google Translate and uploaded, again without proofreading.

if HE has a clit and vagina, I am in the wrong world.

Luvvit- the finer detail are a bit messed up but who cares

My dick is so hard over this…