All Comments on 'Nurse Nancy'

Nice story. Just one question though, does he not have any family or friends? Nobody visited him in hospital, not even his colleagues.

Another great story!

5

Another excellent story. Terry's life seemed cold and sterile, no family mentioned, no colleagues or friends visited him

Loved the finishing sentence - 4.8*

A beautiful story. Page 2 surprised me because it was "telling" her background with the other officer, the accident, and his death. To me, that information would be better suited to Nancy sharing her past with Terry at his place as they ate pizza. But, that is me. Regardless, keep up the good work.

I have to third what Ravey19 and Baldy74 said.

Terry didn't even have other police stop by, between shifts.

Good story, good plot too. A few visitors would have livened up Terry’s stay in the hospital, but not really required. It would only make the story longer. This was one of a KISS story. Keep It Simple Simon.

The real story was between Terry and Nancy. That was worth 5

Terry's plastic surgeon can also reconstruct her breast.

Good story. Thanks.

The cop genre is all grist to your mill. You have it off pat. Not in a cliched fashion, but more

the fresh insights you bring. You dig deep into behavioural motivation and succeed beyond

most measures. again, I can only give 5 stars, when it is worth more.

Small literal: Page 4, Para 21. Line 4 "...make Terry's scars to away." should read "...make Terry's scars go away."