All Comments on 'Nurse's Aide'

Wouldn't it be great if every disabled guy, especially vets, could have a nurse like this.

I'd like to hear more of what happened before the parents returned.

First, the ampersand isn't an acceptable substiture for 'and' the way you've used it here. Too many occurrences.

Next, you need to pick a tense and stay with it. Flip flopping is lazy.

Third, either use dialog or don't; but this weird mixture is off-putting.

Finally, this was just too clinical. No passion in it. Maybe had it been written better... Ah, well.

You really need an editor.

Thank you for this story. I'm disabled myself, although not as much as Mike. I've found rhat many able bodied people assume that disabled people are not able to have sex and are not interested in it. Please continue this story line.

"brake" not "break"

okay first i love i good virgin story and the point of view from a disabled person is not often written about, so maybe that could become your genre, writting about the sexual encounters of different types of disabled people. become their voice.

however i agree with the points made before, you do need a bit of help bringing your stories to life but im sure that will come with time and lots of practise, i look forward to more of your work x

how disabled was he he seems to not be able to use his arm like he his paralized from the neck down ,yet he can move his hips during sex and even get it up. from my expierence in the med field people with total parapligia are unable to feel anything below the neck including genital nerves

quotation marks and editing make stories a lot better

I don't know how this got published. The idea was good, but it's so poorly written. and has no character backstory or development. And you didn't use quotations during dialogue. And you sort of just jump straight into the sex without giving it any tension, or going to deep into the character's feelings. And you never mentioned what kind of disability he has. I feel you really half assed this story. If you really wanted to, you could make it really good.