All Comments on 'Oedipus Realized'

***Thanks for the read.

Excellent, 5 Stars!

Hopefully mom changes opinion and continues their special relationship.

Good start to a longer story I trust.

I can't wait to read more.

Good little story that begs to be continued.

Thank you for sharing this story. For an early submission, I think you did rather well; you demonstrate technical proficiency in your writing. I do want to offer a couple of suggestions. First, I would like to read more dialogue. The story was halfway through before anyone said anything, and only in the last quarter of the story or so were there any fleshed out, full sentences. Where narration describes action, dialogue allows the reader to connect with the characters, and, I think, makes for a better read. My second suggestion: I'm a fan of the mother-son trope; to me, it's one of the most naughty taboos there is. However, you really didn't discuss that in the sex. I'd imagine the narrator would think of her at least sometimes as 'mom' or 'mommy', rather than exclusively using 'she'. I hope you take these comments as constructive. I think you're definitely a writer to watch, and I look forward to more from you.

liked the story just think it should have been longer.

A tale with which most men, consciously or not, can relate.

Well told and quite an experiential format. Loss, with loss. Staid foundations reconnected and experienced.

Nicely done !

Agree with FamilyGuy66 comments. Also, this story was short enough that I felt it could have been finished in one story. Finally, I'm hoping he plans to never leave her. Thanks for this.

absolutely loved it and moved on to read your previous story, great writing, thanks

i'm totally agreed with FamilyGuy, your story could have a little more dialogue between them... but love the story, you're a writer to watch in the future....i look forward to it!!

Beautiful story I hope you write a second chapter.

Mine always made sure that I got a good view of her protruding nipples…nothing hotter than pumping and spurting inside mommy…not worrying about anything except claiming her..

JT

Very nice story but it was too short you needed to continue with more gave it 5 stars!!!!!!!!!