All Comments on 'Off the Streets'

by AtomicPunk13

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Very nice first story

For a first story this is a well written plot. I really enjoyed reading it. Well Done! I hope to see more of your writing...

Lancelot55Lancelot55almost 12 years ago
GOOD!

That was a really good story, with a major surprise at the end. Very well written and very well planned. Please write more!

max43max43almost 12 years ago
Excellent!

Great story and character development. You have the gift - please continue writing.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
No reality

Over a period of months, his dead wife grows tits and then fucks him - find another hobby- FYI- most dead people do not leave notes when they disappear - and further most people who have beed dead for a long time smell real bad.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Good idea,uneven execution

This is a clever story, with a good denouement. A bit of editing would help on spelling, as misspellings can be very distracting. You have some abilities & I look forward to your next effort.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago

Nice! Please continue being a writer..

brian358brian358over 11 years ago
Bravo!

I wish I could give you six stars for one of the best stories I've ever read here.

It's not often you get grabbed equally by the balls and the heart but you managed both perfectly.

You really should write again.

Thanks for a great story.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago

Very well done. Keep on writing.

KitschshamanKitschshamanover 10 years ago
great

way cool twist at the end, well done.

Chief3BlanketChief3Blanketover 9 years ago
Odd

The way it ended was not expected and was a little disconcerting. I would like to read as equal or another chapter or two to findi out how Andrew's life turned out after this strange experience.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
wonderful

This story was unique and just about made me cry at end! Unexpected. I actually used to occasionally have sex with a very chesty woman that occasionally had bouts of homelessness.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago

My wife died of a drug overdose several years ago . wish I could find a replacement for her --- she was the love of my life

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
The Ending!

Ending is so well thought-out and heartfelt. Great job, please keep it coming!

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Was the woman pregnant like why did milk come out?

Rancher46Rancher46about 2 years ago

This story was unique and just about made me cry at end! The twist at the end as truly unexpected.

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