All Comments on 'Office Girl'

Loved the story, really well written just a bit short. Want more

... merely because it is apparently the first story that you have Posted.

Despite the fact that some site members are so lax in their reading that they have 'favorited' your story it is, in fact, poorly written.

Sloppy, in fact!!

Several totally unnecessary errors showing that you spent absolutely no time at all over proof reading!! Including one error each in the first and third sentences!!

If you can't be bothered to proof read, and correct the errors, why should anyone bother to read it?

Frankly, not bothering to proof read is almost an insult to those you hope will read your story.

If you need help then go to Literotica Index, Volunteer Editors and ask someone to guide you.

Please point out the errors. I can't find them. thanks

n yes it's my first post. Thanks for the positive comment anon number 2. encouraging.

ah ok by instead of my.. sorry. but well too much excitement to see that mistake. sorry

Cute little story but not very entertaining. You cannot expect accolades over an unfinished story. It might also be a good idea to proofread your writings. There were several grammatical errors.

If you decide to continue remember people do not enjoy reading just the first page of a story when there could be room for many more pages of adventure that lead to some sort of a finality.