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Anonymousalmost 10 years agoUm... you and her are so all over the place
Nice story, but near the end you completely lost track of what perspective you were writing and to who. Calling her 'you', and then reverting. Hard to read and follow. Try and review your work next chapter.
Anonymousalmost 10 years agoagree with other commenter
It was hot but would have been steaming if you had stuck with her and I. Rather than you and I.
Anonymousalmost 10 years agoStarted strong...
but completely lost it when you started randomly changing back and forth between "her" and "you"
Shadowforce1almost 10 years agoTotally Confusing
Good Story, but like the other's. Need to stick to one perspective. Throws people off.
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