All Comments on 'Oh Brother'

This story really pushed a lot of buttons for me. I was in a similar situation. In my case the 'perfect child' was my little brother. I had the world by the tail for 2 years 3 months 5 days 12 hours and 17 minutes (yeah, I was bitter for a long time and 'maybe' overthought this a bit), then he showed up and I was yesterday's news. At least as far as my mother was concerned. I can't count the number of times I got blamed for something he did or got in trouble for letting him do something he shouldn't have. I was the older brother and should have looked out for him. Never mind he was a devious little shit that defied discipline. I never had a girlfriend he didn't try to steal. In the long run things caught up with him though. After my mother died, my father found out he had been embezzling from the family business for years and my mother covered it up. (she was the bookkeeper for the business, so it wasn't hard.) Thus finally ended his favored son status. After repaying my father (or jail, his choice) he was left with very little money and little chance of ever regaining it. Now, over 60 and on his fourth marriage, he works in a junkyard. (he never got an education as my mother pandered to his every whim, including buying him a house and making his car payments.) I, on the other hand, did and have a six figure income to show for it. I've also been married to the same wonderful woman for over 35 years. How did I know she was the one? She saw my brother as the womanizing degenerate he was and actually laughed in his face when he made a pass at her. I believe her response was "When the day comes that I want a micro-dicked mama's boy, I'll call you. Don't hold your breath." To her dying day, my mother despised my wife. My father did and still does adore her and since my mother's passing, he and I have come a long way towards putting all this behind us. For those that don't think these kind of things happen, I assure you they do. Unfortunately, most don't get the satisfaction of seeing the favored child crater. I did and it was a very therapeutic thing. I let go of a lot of anger and pain after that. Ultimately, my brother is just as much a victim as I was. My mother made him what he was. I have forgiven him, but we are not and never will be close. Just too much baggage. 5 stars for portraying your MC as a compassionate person unwilling to allow circumstances he had no control over to destroy him. Removing himself from the situation was the best choice. I was estranged from my family for most of 15 years and in that time I made a happy life for myself, my wife and our kids. When I let them back in it was on my terms.

Just a well written good read.

It seems sad to me that some people feel / act like they are experts on the subject (regardless of what the subject is). If you don't believe that just read the comment section.

Thank you BG33, I enjoy your tales. 5 stars

somewhere east of Omaha

2 stars for this crap. His mother was a bitch and her explanation at the end was so feeble. Suddenly, years of trauma and abuse from his parents are fucking forgiven in the blink of an eye. Michael's letter was fucking unnecessary. Asshole writer wanting to tie this crap in a nice bow

Henry's mother was a cunt and his father a fucking wimp. His brother is an asshole like the mother. He should have remained without them.

very good

Just a fun fantasy read!! For a change the MC has some brain power and was willing to (mostly anyway) use it.

Having personal experience with a short meet the girl to marrying her (4.5 months) and now together 50+ years i know it can happen even when you don’t expect it!!!!

1% of the American female population is 6 foot or above. Accounting for age demographics, the liklihood of coming across a 6 foot woman that isn't either man like ugly or an actual model is slim.

There are far more good looking women that are 5'10" making them 6'2" with 4" heels.

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Personally I just assume that any woman that's 6" or above is transitioned. Always better to be safe than sorry, err on the side of caution.

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I don't know what it is with LW authors that go for statistical outliers like twins, big dicks, tall women, excessively skilled MC's, wealthy, etc. Gimmicks aren't needed, as normal people have pretty fkd up melodramatic lives too.

Just couldn't accept the ease at which he connected with Jamie, personally I couldn't have done it knowing that it would inevitably bring me back into contact with Tara and potentially the family I'd rejected.

While it was good to see a soldier doing the cucking for a change, the guy was a piece of shit. The fact that he was a soldier, or that he died in service doesn't give him a free pass. Fort Leavenworth is full of soldiers that are also scum.

The reconciliation at the end was just ridiculous and unwarranted. You don't get a clean slate just because something terrible happens to you. It's not even as if the parents made the first move, they could have sent a letter to Tara to deliver to Henry apologising and trying to make amends, but waiting till the favoured son dies, just sounds like a fall back/spare position.

The letter did nothing for me, mostly because it just felt fake, a plot by the author, out of character and no, having seen immanent death isn't enough, otherwise most soldiers would return as reformed, pleasant individuals rather than fkd up ptsd DV monsters prone to alcoholism and homelessness.

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Ultimately it didn't matter that everyone had been bad towards Henry. He just needed to get over himself, and everything would work out OK. Really surprised that Tara didn't ask to be impregnated by Henry as I'm sure Jamie would have given him the OK. /s

With a 5'4" sister that would most likely make Tara either the result of an affair or a fully transitioned male.

Really though, who wants a 6' woman. 5'8" with 4" heals is far better. 6'4" men or women just look like freaks.

Well written as usual but the reconciliation with the family was a stretch into sci-fi/fantasy

Thanks for writing

Well crafted, but as is so prevalent in short stories, the almost instant connection between couples (Henry & Jamie) seems contrived. yes, a more convoluted and winding trail takes words, time, and planning, but makes for a believable story. Was Tara an evil witch? No, just weak and self-centered I suppose. Michael, on the other hand was a spoiled older brother with entitlement issues spawned by a mother who doted on and pandered to his arrogance. Henry showed fortitude to face down his family and carve out his own life. Still, while healthy, all the forgiveness in the final event felt a bit saccharine.

A rare 4 star instead of a 5 the only other non 5 in your catalogue is that crazy sister steals wife mc Folds and rolls over story . As always good writing, understandable and emotional.story wise I can see forgiving Tara for Jamie’s sake, just keep an eye on her . but the family and the brothers funeral… I’m not sure a person would be able to reasonable get over that sort of hurt in that

amount of time. The family could be forgiven eventually

But the brother I just don’t see reading the letter or anything he’s done and burnt his bridge. Personally I don’t like Tara nor the brother they are both despicable. You used them as masterful heels in the story

I liked it , but realistically I wouldn’t care about the brother at all

5 star i really like your srories

I can understand this ending.

Yes MC had to let it go and forgive but the fact is if his brother loved him like a brother he wouldn't go behind his back and scew his girlfriend.

If his girlfriend had deep feelings for MC at the very least if she was decent she would break up with him.

He was better off not exposing his kids upbringing to that bunch.

Most likely.

5 stars from me.

Some miserable commenters on hear.

Sit and listen the "The Living Years" by Mike and the Mechanics

Agree with anon.. author likes wimpy cucks...

No comment just 3 star. 🌟🌟🌟

Ending sucked

My son was an active duty Marine who was living with his fiancée (also a Marine). When he came back from Iraq he was totally messed up. When he was again deployed she left him with just a “dear John “ letter. He is a great , good looking man & now ten years later he is unmarried and does not date.

A tour with a reserve company to Afghanistan really helped him get his head back where it belongs, but he’s still not totally back to normal. He moved to be with his sister & her family & is a doting uncle.

You don’t have to die to sacrifice for your country.

Bill S.

When Tara caught him at the restaurant and said 'may I join you', I would have go up, threw some notes onto the table and walked out without a glance at the trollop, leaving her alone and embarassed. His mother saying 'brought to her attention' and glancing at her husband; I was expecting her to say, 'well actually Michael isn' your brother, he was the result of an infidelity on my half which your father forgave me for but he never accepted Michael. Hey hum perhaps I should have been a writer. Just a 3 because it was the same old same old, nymphomaniac girl friend/wife fucks all and sundry; 'it was only sex'.

same old bullshit lame ass wimpy protagonist. author likes his wimps.

No. That’s it. Just, NO

Family does not deserve reconciliation. Just trade Christmas cards.

He and Jamie had already agreed no contact between Tara and him personally. Then she moved in?!

As usual with this author, MC is a wimp.

What awful trash. Who hurt you?

I like your stories but for some unknown reason I never left a comment on this story!

5

Check your grammar. If you want to have more than one parent, put the apostrophe AFTER the s.

Highbrow huh, figures. I thought the story was fine and I don't think they were shooting for the Noble prize in literature. Any more then my comments deserve to be published in the Post. Lots of love for ya. haha

Terrible, stilted dialogue, like listening to a computer read a text. Or, a language lesson:

Hi, Î’m Dan.

Hi, I’m Jan.

Goodbye.

Goodbye.

Great story. At least it wasn't a cheating wife. Having a brother that was an asshole too, I really empathized with the Henry character. We tried to mend our childhood stuff as we got older, and we did somewhat, but he died of cancer before he was 50. Thanks for sharing this story. 5 stars just because I felt a lot of the turmoil

Lots of pieces of shit in this story. It’s kinda like rape, rob, pillage and rake havoc all your life. Destroy and ruin the lives and future of many. Then toward the end say your sorry and beg for forgiveness and low and behold Jesus Christ gives it to you. WOW. I guess some people are built different that others, will do anything they like and hurt all that’s gets in the way. I served in the USMC and I’ve been with my bride for over 50 great years. My beautiful daughter married a Marine, turned out he was just Like Michael. Great story, well written and thought provoking.

Loved it, thanks

I like that the brother and ex-girlfriend learned something and possibly grew up, but it still doesn't excuse what they did. I had an ex-brother-in-law who was an ex-marine and he turned out to be a complete piece of shit, in the end he cheated on my sister, left his daughter a complete mess (she seems to be getting her life together recently, I have hope for her now, at least her daughter, my grand niece has her life going really well despite her mothers termoil) personally he deserved the way his life went (STD's, divorced and disgraced as a worthless man).

Sorry for the rant.

Lol, agree with Anon....you can hide in the romance category but you're still a wimp

This guys family really are just POS's! Guy fucks his brothers girl and hes to blame? You need to treat Henry better because he's the only one who'll give us grandkids? I'm glad he forgave them for his sake not for theirs his family has no redeeming qualities and I would keep them as far away from me as possible!

Continued to be disgusting!! Just cos someone is a war hero does not wash over the treatment meted out! How can a man with no morals ever be a good soldier? I am one…and I firmly believe that how I act in battle wil be based on my values! It’s the way one is…either u have integrity or u don’t! It’s not something that only comes on for short periods!! Bro was an asshole and parents were worse! As always writer ends up wimping and a cucky MC !!

I think this story does a good job of showing how complicated life can be. Can you be a complete piece of shit but still love the people you treat like shit? Yeah I think in a sick kind of way. Yeah his brother was a scumbag and his mother was so busy enabling that she treated her other son like shit and his dad was so busy going along to get along that he didn't do the right thing by him either. Is all of that true? Yes it is but his brother is dead now so what would be the point in keeping up with the feud? I think he did the right thing for himself and his wife and baby after all he is the one who gets to live happily ever after while his brother went to his grave knowing what a douche he was! Forgiveness is not weakness only blind faith is!

So so, a 4 star I guess. Anon comment of 3 months ago is correct.

Decent story,though I don't accept some one like Michael would write that letter.

You can hide in the romance category but you are still a simp.

The mother was a horrible, biased woman, the brother a total asshole, the father a spineless wimp and the girlfriend a shallow slut. Why would he want any contact with any of these people? His brother's letter to him at the end, was a farce! All his life he was a bastard to his younger brother! "He is mine to bully.No one else touches him." That's brotherly love?? And why would he have a sudden change of heart??!! Michael was a bastard. He should have been left as such! Otherwise, a good story. 4*s.

For me, this was both well written and an excellent “yarn”.

Thank you so much for posting/sharing it.

Best regards,

Craig

I didn't like ANY character in this story, not even Jamie. I mean, they are having sex for the first time and the bitch keeps talking about other people! How annoying is that?

Just because their favourite son is dead then they realised that they have another son somewhere. What a fish of an excuse. This is definitely not one of the good story, but thank you for your story. Deserve only two star ⭐🌟.

Wow, so good! Thanks for this one, Bigguy!

One of your best BigGuy. Great story. Great writing.

This is soft as fuck. Are you sure you have any balls between your legs? Sometimes I think you do but other times it's this weak shit. My gods what a shit story.

This one is playing to your strength --- the Renunciation story --- but it doesn't quite land. The mom continuously blaming Henry for Mike's misdeeds was over-the-top. And Jamie tracking down Henry on the off-chance that they might have chemistry was an implausible plot point. Why not just have Jamie and Henry meet when Henry was dating Tara, so that Jamie knows beforehand that she and Henry had potential as a couple?

If the brother was still alive, the mom would still act as b4. It is only now because her fav son is dead she chooses him. Sorry but he should've just stayed away and let his fam reap what the sow.

Ugh, still shouldn't have forgiven them. Why do so many authors feel it is either reconciliation or burn them? Brother having an epiphany when faced with death is cliché but at least different.

I gave it a 5 but I have always had a problem with cheaters.

Death is too easy a payback on his bro. He should have lived and suffered for the rest of his life, Too much forgiveness for his family. ughhh!

That letter is hilarious. The entire part after Mike's death just seems like gaslighting 101. Overall, world's probably better off without him, got too many assholes as it is.

The trolls won't see the response to them, because they write the crap and move on some place else to their spread discontent and smuggley think how smart they are. Hey we all are who we are live in your own skin.

Bob p

Trolls are just looking for a place to tear somebody down so they can feel superior to someone (iam smarter than you, that sort of things. I would pity them but most seem to be a bunch of a-holes and even undeserving of pity) but they read this and don't think it applies to them, they are above that..

Thanks to the authors here you all deserve better.

The story gets 5 stars - most of the people writing comments are zeros. I have nothing but respect for writers (and those who show support). Constructive criticism is one thing, but have no use for the trolls who feel a need to tear apart a good tale and its writer simply for some personal need for attention.

Crap. When the shit-brother bought it, he should have rejoiced. When the longest living parent died and the nursing home rang to ask him for instructions regarding the body, he should have answered "Take it to the landfill".

I always find it gross when the wronged party ends up with the sibling

Good story! Thank-you

Read this story on You Tube. That one ended where Jamie met Henry and they had their first talk. Another writer picked it up and 6 chapters later he finished it. Your ending was different but I still enjoyed it. You Tube dropped the writer that wrote the first part and this is the first time I was able to read it again. Though both stories ended different I enjoyed reading it all the way to the end. Thanks.

So even in death Michael leaves the world as the better brother, Henry now has to contend with a fallen hero brother who now has an unassailable reputation, any further impeachment of Michael’s behaviour and descriptions of Henry’s treatment growing up at the hands of his brother will be treated as mealy-mouthed sour grapes.

Quite mercenary of good old mom to want to apologise now she only has the one son left. He will always be second best ‘Oh Henry’s nice enough but Michael was our heroic man of action look at all these medals’ as mommy gets a far off look and a wistful smile crosses her lips.

Such a wonderful family.

Read this on YouTube years ago. There are several more chapters...

I think Henry would have gotten together with Michael if he had come home. Michael grew up. Tara did too. Strange that for both of them their parents were the ones that kept them from maturing emotionally. I like to think Michael and Tara might have gotten back together.

Thank you BG33. This is another example of good writing and an uplifting message. Five stars ⭐️ for this one!

I first read this story on YouTube some time ago. It was posted in 2 parts with the first part telling of Henry's split from his parents and finding a relationship with Jamie. The second part started with Jamie being pregnant, St. Michael's death and Henry reconnecting with his parents. The second part was taken down early on, so Gopher Broke wrote an ending based on only the first part. For those that are curious, you can read an alternate ending at: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Kczy4VkFK7s

My second comment is: Did you know we have a mind reader in our midst? (see anonymous comments from 8/4 20) Don't you wish we all had that kind of insight into an author's mind as he was writing a story? Maybe we would rather not come off as half-brained blowhard. Maybe anonymous should quit reading minds and publish some of his stories on these pages, so we could all read his mind as to what he wanted when he wrote them. This guy needs to GET A LIFE. I really liked this story with either ending. 5 stars. Great job. Thanks for sharing. CC

"Protecting the world"... Is that what you actually think the american army is doing??

You're a decent writer... But you won't b3 a really good writer until you stop writing for the purpose of pats on the back... Your stories flow as if you're checking the boxes as you write... "Ok... People like to read this... Check 2... People like to read that"... And as a result your stories come across as contrived... And give the impression that you have nothing real to say... Other than these cliched plots... Until you stop writing what you think people want... And start writing the stories from your core... Regardless of what people think... You'll never really be good... No offense... But I think the word that is used... Is hack... As always... Jmo

-jaye-

I agree that family betrayal is the worst , if not best friend or spousal betrayal. Basically unforgivable. But of course , family requires some room for moving on. The brother , even with his poignant letter , was never going to completely get back in his heart. Glad that his mom and dad did. Feel Tara was given an easy ride. Didn't need to see her burn , but she betrayed him so quickly without communication. You used the same trick as in the sisters betrayal, that the love they had was more of some friendship; there was no magic there. Implying that they were just marking time until something better came along , even if that wasn't what they thought they were doing. I realize for the story to be short this had to happen in a few scenes , but it felt false. As did his reconciling with Tara. I mean , like his parents and his brother , they needed some slack, but , as is so popular in these stories , forgive but not forget. Understand that Tara became important because he loved her sister, and hate isn't worth holding on to. But trust is.

Ironically this story was about people,namely Michael,Tara,and Henry,and sure both Tara and Michael betray his brother it shows they're only human,and nearly ruined their family,but thankfully Tara and Michael and Henry's Parents saw the error of their ways and tried to fix it after Michael's death.

Sadly Michael never got the chance to make amends but the letter he sent to Henry before he died was like his deathbed confession,and Henry forgave Michael.Now Tara realized how much she hurt Henry and accepted her loss of him,but she wanted to make it up to him by helping her sister Jamie and Henry fall in love and having a wonderful family.This story was truly emotional and sad but also happy that the family came back together somewhat.

I can never get why some readers trash really well written stories like this one. Is it a need to make yourself feel superior?

If you want to prove to me that you are, put your name on the comment so I can click on you and read one of your offerings to see what a superior story looks like.

Or is that the deal? Never written a thing, but gets off putting down those that do?

Good work BG, pay no attention to the man behind the curtain.

5*s for this one.

I almost stopped after Tara slept with Michael but I'm glad I finished it. When Henry told his family he was done with them was a great but writing, I always wonder why no one seems to give their characters a backbone. Great story all the way around.

No, blood does not matter above all. There is no reason to maintain any sort of relationship with people who betray you. That a family member would do it only makes it worse. How can it be healthy to subject yourself to being around them?

Meh!

Your a great writer.....you really are. And your stories start off great.......but they all end in the same way.

With the guy losing any semblance of pride or self respect and taking his cheating wife or girlfriend back. And to add insult to injury the family who betrayed him.

Sorry but its just to much

Can you write a story where the guy walks away without listening to the crap of those who betrayed him?

Where the guy walks away with his pride?

To forgive a whore of a Mom and Brother? I don't think so. I can respect honoring a military members sacrifice, but that doesn't forgive the whore that he was or his Mom.

"Jamie, you know the baggage I come with. I'll have nothing to do with my family, and I have no interest in seeing your sister ever again. Can you live with that?"

"I'm not concerned about your family, Henry. That's your business. I would prefer to have in-laws but it's not a deal breaker. Now I love my sister, in spite of her faults, and I won't be cut off from her. Having said that, I won't expect you to visit with her; I just expect that you won't stop me from doing so."

***So, no then, well Jamie have a good life, consider yourself on the same list as my family and your sister

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"It's Michael," Tara said.

"Is that all? You bothered me at work for that asshole."

"Henry, he was killed."

***Again, why are you bothering me with this?

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I got a chance to meet Tara's sister, Jamie, when she came to town. I heard you guys got married and that I'm an uncle to a little girl.

*** Umm Jamie? You want to let me know how you managed to meet my brother when you agreed not to meet any of my family, also any idea how my dead brother knew you were pregnant before I did?

So after there favorite one dies, they go to the runt. Another one ruined by a stupid ending. Waste of time reading this. Why do they start good then fuck up the ending?

Finally a story that knocks these scum bags off their pedestal.

The courtship with the sister does not fit. She shows up and everything is settled?

Then when will you people forget that thing “defend my country; fighting for freedom”? Where is your enemy? Freedom from what? (I am in Europe as you might guess).

Apart from that I like most of your stories.

After being a bastard all his life, he suddenly becomes St. Michael by dying?! What a cynical son-of-a-bitch to think he was doing Henry a favour by showing Tara as a slut! 'Any man knows that by seducing another man's woman he's dealing him a mortal wound. Michael was a cad with no moral fibre and was encouraged to be such by his mother, throughout his life! Henry dumped them and they should have stayed dumped!!!

Why frustrating? You can write. I mean you're a good author. You have the technical aspects down and your characters and dialogue draw the reader into your stories. But for Christ's sake! Can't you give your lead male characters some spines or backbones? There's not a single man on the planet that doesn't send Jamie packing after she explains who she is and what she wants. If he's willing to move far, far away, end his relationship with Tara, end his relationship with Michael and his parents, what on Earth would make him want to have anything to do with Jamie? Even a moron knows that if he's seeing Jamie, she's talking about him to her sister. He has to understand that, down the line, Jamie will want to see Tara. And that she will, like any woman, try to fix his relationship with his Brother and his parents. It's who women are. It's ingrained in their DNA. So even dating Jamie is a horrible idea. Then you went and did it. They date, they marry, they have a kid. And he gets sucked back in. Now you tried to soft soap it, make it look like everything was going to be all happy, happy, joy, joy. But that's complete bullshit. It will never be okay. He maybe talks to them, but he will never forget all the years that he suffered. Truly an awful ending to a story that had great potential. And THAT is why you're such a frustrating author. Start out good, end bad. UGH!

So his brother dies and everyone is now forgiven. I don't think that's possible. With the hate that Henry felt, that was deep down inside of him. There is just NO WAY he could forgive anyone. Just not possible.

"part of me reasoned that I had done you a favor. Hadn't I helped by showing you who she was, I thought to myself"

If she hopped in the sack with him that fast, it could have just as easily have been some dude in a bar.

I don't see how this story can be viewed as any sort of a Cuck thing. He did everything right. He dumped them all and bailed out.

Short of going on a shooting rampage ( I knew a guy who did that, killing his cheating wife, her lover, and then himself and leaving 2 young kids parentless), what else should he have done?

I admired the way he did it and the best "Revenge" was hooking up with the sister and have the "Fairy Tale" family and life. BigGuy was able to show the love his wife had for him thru the writing. That's a fairly rare gift.

They're fictional.

Blame sissy BG33. He is apparently a cuck or wannabe and enjoys passive spineless men.

Write what you know I guess.

That at the moment the mother learned of Michaels death, for an instant (or longer), she wished it was Henry instead. You can nearly bet on it.

Only wants a relationship with him, now that golden boy is dead. Fuck off old woman, I don't know you, or your corpse son.

Really good story. Well thought out kept me interested the entire time. Keep up the good work.

He should of wiped it out at the Funeral and pissed on the Casket

His mother was WRONG (on many, many levels) his father was WEAK NOT KIND!! He had to have seen what his wife was doing to the kids and he needed to MAN up and take responsibility for his part in the parenting. Instead he just let it ride and look how it turned out. Might not qualify as child abuse but it was a long, long way from good parenting!! If he had stood up to her while the kids were young things might have been much different.

Henry should not have reconciled so completely. It should be a good while before his parents see their grandchild again. He should not have given his address to them. After all they were in no hurry to reconcile with him. Even after the supposed 'big fight' nothing really changed. They did nothing to reach out to Henry. Jamie and Tara can send pictures every now and then and Henry should not be in them. Maybe after their second child turns two or three Henry can consider his folks seeing the kids again. Maybe by then both his parents would have grown up and started acting like responsible adults. Their explanations/weak apologies are much too little and much too late. You may not be able to pick your family, BUT you are able to pick whether or not to spend any time with them.

As to Michael, well we can't say a lot of good about him. Was he a good Marine? Yes! Did he give his all for this country? Again, yes. Should he be honored and remembered for that sacrifice? YES, of course. BUT!! That's all he should be remembered for. As a commenter said on another story: we remember and honor them for what they have done. They don't get a pass on the other aspects of their lives. How many people in Hollywood do we praise for their acting ability but as human beings they are FAR BELOW average. How many athletes do we praise on the field but off the field their behavior is abhorrent. As a brother, Michael was an abysmal failure. He spent most of his life tormenting Henry and didn't think twice about cheating with Tara. Why would Henry want to be around people like that. Was Michael going to change? We'll never know. But even if he did it would take years to repair the damage he did to Henry.

We can all be glad the author didn't have Henry planning to name one of his kids after him.

Better ending.....

Say an eulogy.

Bring up what a smarmy cheating lying backstabbing brother he was.

Then piss on his grave. Say Fuck you to mom dad and tara. "Mom now you only have one son left. Bet you are wishing now you had treated me nicer. Bye. Have a sad life"

Leave the scene skipping and singing.

Just cause he is dead doesn't make him any less of an asshole. Or your mom any less of a bitch.

One star for the usual wimpy male.

I don’t know if this is what you meant to get across but holy shit the mother’s apology was wasted. What I took from her speech was she was apologizing so she could see her grandchildren not because she actually understood what she did wrong. The line she repeated that her husband said to her about grandkids implied to me that that was the reason she was apologizing. That’s honestly pathetic and if that’s the best apology I got for a lifetime of neglect then fuck her.

I agree with people who say the letter from the brother felt false but I think it was as honest as the asshole could get.

Good story but the Jamie romance was too fast and I didn’t like the dialogue with the mom.

I would never of gotten involved with any member of my ex's family after being treated that way by her.

You hadn’t had the romance with Jamie be so fast or so cheesy. I loved everything else even if I’m not sure I would’ve been so forgiving to the mom. I get letting go with the brother. He’s dead it’s over. I thought that letter was bullshit and rang of crap but the only flip side is that might have been as sincere as the asshole was capable of.

never would have forgiven my brother for fucking my girl and generally lording it over me all my life nor the cunt mother.

This one was solid . There were a couple eye-rolling scenes but I expect that from amateur story. There's too many praiseworthy aspects to note BUT to concentrate on one - the sea change in main character's ability to set aside grievances was paced very well. I honestly marvel at those people who can cut their parents dead or freeze them out for life.

Whatever wrong they did as you were growing up - they changed your shitty diapers for 3 years ( average ) , fed you for 18 years ( average ) and got you to a point where you fend for yourself. Mistakes were made , quite likely grievous ones along the way . So you grieve ...simmer and stew in your resentment. ... that's fine but barring molestation or physical abuse, there's a shelf life to being entitled not to forgive.

Shit. Starting to sound like Oprah. There's a lot of ways that TV icon and I part ways but Google what she says about this subject if you're on the tipping point. Excellent writing on delicate and touchy subject .

Full marks * * * * *

This must be your "utterly disgusting" period. When you tried to write the most revulsive RAAC possible. Well, congrats! This story and "Of All People" ranked in the first places. Once is to give people second chances (when they deserved and earned them of course) and another very different thing is to lose all self-respect, to chop your own balls and act like a wimpy faggot.

Truly disgusting. I hope you got the help you need.

Utterly so but thanks for writing it.

... did he not mean? “Dead brother? What brother?” I guess he didn’t really mean it.

If I had gone to the casket I would have probably spit on it. Then flipped off my mother.

And this BS about “thank you for your service”? Michael didn’t do it for service to the country. He did it because he got a kick out of it; his usual selfish self. And in reality Henry would know this.

And this shit about ‘I got in a fight and suspended defending your honor’? Three days school suspension vs YEARS (quite literally) of punishments by mother? Not even a comparison. And most likely mom was all over Michael for how brave and good a brother he was for protecting Henry.

Also, on a different note, what’s with the terms of endearment by day 2 between Henry and Jamie? That’s just ridiculously fast. It’s one thing to have that “spark” immediately (I’ve certainly felt it before), but you still don’t “know” her/him yet. So “baby” this and “honey” that on second day seems ridiculous. Maybe he/she hates that term. You just don’t know, yet.

I'd of told Jamie to get lost, I don't want ANY family or friends of members from either family, mine or Tara's, to be around me, contact me or be in the same state as I'm in.