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Not that great. To start with, stay in first person if the narrator/writer is the main character. You went from “I’m Paul. . . “ to he, him, I, back to Paul in past tense, etc. I was wondering who all these men are. Secondly, the story is just not that good.

Horrible ; sentences run on some make no sense

My old nipples get hard and long. They love to be sucked.