All Comments on 'Old Lady will Never be Lonely'

My immediate reaction is 'good first attempt' but I see it is far from that.

I think you are trying to write a mini novel but it's too matter of fact, in some ways it feels a bit like a carers report at the end of a home visit.

I wonder if you have previously had criticism from across the Atlantic and you have dumbed it down to pander to their version of the English language.

The storyline and material are there but less 'I said, she said' would be better, I've given a 4* to a fellow brit.