All Comments on 'Old Testament'

Interesting

Cheers

SAGE

to fix their little red wagons

And read them chapter and verse from the Good Book!! Well done!

⭐⭐⭐⭐

Just saying that "Leviticus 20:20" was nulled and voided by a much newer directive in the very laterst verson of the Good Book: "let he without a sin cast the first stone". Which, I think, was issued by the founder of your religion...

Enjoyed it. Definitely worth additional chapters if you feel the need. I would most definitely read them.

Plenty of potential but just feels like there a massive amount missing.

Darn.

One of those 750-word stories where I think it should be more than 750.

For me, the story has a great premise too bad it was a short one.

But thanks anyway, Texican 1830.

Nice one. No cucks.

I hate cuck (and sharing, swinging, cheating) stories

about time

The next day, their union representative notified Ed that he couldn’t terminate them for actions off of company property and off duty so . . . .

Always dangerous to screw your bosses wife without his consent!

5

I honestly don't know why I bother reading these 750-word massacres......The majority of which are not stories but JUST PART of a story. This could have been a very good STORY rather than a few paragraphs that should probably have been in the middle of a REAL STORY.

Fantastic! Five stars.

I loved it.

Efficient vignette of a marriage and a life. No need for PI's, lawyers, or all that tripe. Echoes of the Duke. Quiet resolve teamed with immediate action. I like it.

Worked well as a 750 word project story. However, it would also work well as the basis for a much longer piece.

Wow! Good burn, Tex!

Lol. Amusing.

Pt2. Please...??? need to see the life falla apart and he keeps getting wealthy? Author on this never make these type stories long enough

It was a bit weak know !?!

Very good! That’s 2 excellent flash tales today! Thank you!

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4 very strong ****

Just wait a couple of years, with the current SCOTUS, not being able to kill the adulterers will be considered limiting your constitutional freedom to exercise your religion in the near future, coming to a state near you :)

I didn’t get your punchline. I’m hoping it wasn’t a case of not rereading your story one more time. Did you perhaps mean Leviticus 24:20 - “a fracture for a fracture, an eye for an eye, a tooth for a tooth. Whatever anyone does to injure another person must be paid back in kind.”

‭still gave it 4/5

Nice! 5*

5*. Consistent with my philosophy. Deguello.

Short but straight to the point, That point being the pointy end of the spear. Love it /// Keep more coming

A righteous 5*****! Obviously, he was well ahead of them. Cheating spouses often make poor employees, so well done!

This "story" is essentially part of a last chapter of a much longer and more interesting saga of adultery, promiscuity, betrayal, and complete contempt and disrespect. Uh, why didn't you write it? I bet it could have been great. At least you gave us what you apparently think is the ultimate Burn The Bitch: he FIRED her fuck buddies and divorced her. Of course the wife will be getting 50% of the business he just fired them from, plus they'll be collecting unemployment benefits which his company will be paying. Yeah, maybe the whole story should be left to some other writer, who has more than one Bible quotation and fourteen envelopes in his tool box of revenge. I'm not sure you are the man for the task. But thanks for the effort.

Admire main character's commitment to living one's life according to Old Testament Commandments. Few do today.

That would make those folks the dumbest in the county, dumbest unemployed and soon to be divorced for a few.

He must have had some idea about them when he hired them, maybe?

Typically 750 word story. Just another in a long line of Lucy pulling the football from Charlie Brown.

Ed was talking fire and brimstone but it appears he doesn't have the balls to follow through with his apparently favorite scripture.

1* for no epilogue or wrap up.

Excellent.

Short, sweet, and to the point!

Time for some Wuuup Ass!!!!

Those people were really stupid. Fucking around with their boss' wife! Boss who employed almost all people in town!

This was good but I need a follow-up! Please! :)

And then???

blasphemer. Don't play around around with the holy words

I am not an Old Testament guy, but I love this! All 5*s today.

Great story, loved the finish.

It's great to be the "King"'

Nice. I bet that was a surprise for the wife and her "friends" short sharp to the point.

Great story as is, but I would have liked to have seen a little righteous ass kicking on Harvey and Babe.

Follow up plz

And God said; and there was; so he did.

Anticlimatic......Not up to your usual standards.

Texican? Dude? This is the shortes story I think you've ever written! Hey, I still liked it and gave it 5 BIG FAT BRIGHT TWINKLY STARS but I was surprised. Short and sweet, it was! "Vengeance is mine sayeth the Lord" Romans 12:19

Half way to dumb, half way to alright.

Best i can do.

More please !

Need some follow up, maybe a 750 word sequel

Amen

This was one of the better 750-word challenges BUT this should have been 2500-3000 words with much more detail. Still a 5 though.

Very good start but way too short.

Company fuck-fest that didn't include the boss. Not a good idea, especially as it included the boss's wife.

5 stars - Revenge without violence ALWAYS works for me - I like this short story.

Short, sweet and to the point. Yes it would work as a longer story too, but this was great. Thanks for writing!

Commented in 25 words! Woot!

What part of 750 words do people not understand? Of course a good 750 word story would also be a good basis for a longer story. But just like “The Twilight Zone”, you get to imagine where the story might lead. If you lack imagination, stop reading 750 word stories!

Sorry, but 750 word project is not supposed to be a part of a longer story. If you want a much longer and involved story with a somewhat similar ending, it’s coming soon.

ReedRichard, this is Texas. At-will employees in a right to work state can be fired for any reason.

It's great. It's Rare. Whoda thunk that we'd get a Bible lesson from this source. I'm sure most of us need it. LP

wasn't a bunch of bright people was it!

Great short story!

Tex, it's not that this is supposed to be part of a longer story, but it shouldn't FEEL like a part of a longer story. This one is borderline. For the employees, ending with the firing is fine, but what happens with the divorce? Does she fight it? Accept it? How is his life post-divorce?

Thanks, SBrooks. I’ll plan to do a pre- and post-mortem if that’s the case. These contests all seem have rules like “it all has to take place at work” and “can’t be part of a longer story” - maybe I got these rules mixed up.

Tex clearly marked this as a 750 word shortie, folks. If three panel cartoons are not your cuppa (love the Lucy & football reference in comments below), stick to full length comic books.

For my money, Tex did a fantastic job of snapping a "moment in time" photo with this 750 story. I do not look forward to either a sequel or a full length film. IMO, Tex, move on to the next story plot.

Keep 'em comin'.

Don't be micro-managed. You don't need this to be part of a larger story or meet anybody else's expectations. I think you did fine.

Very, very good.

Sorry; I'm more of a new age religious being. Lets just stick with the new regs and bring in good ole number 6 from the top 10 hit parade. Just remember if you do the crime, ya gotta do the time.

Damn good. Fuckum . Leave it just like it is.

Excellent! 5/5

I was really hesitant about reading this to start with because I didn't want to read the same old cuckold garbage that seems to be the bread and butter of the Loving Wives crowd. I loved the Leviticus 20:10 quote. Another Bible verse that I like is Psalm 79:12 - Return seven-fold into the bosom of our neighbors the taunts with which they taunted you...

Good story but needed more

Good story. Thanks for your writing.

Too bad it was too short

Not good enough, men should have the right to punish cheaters as they see fit. That includes euthanasia. Still a 5 but has the problem all shorts have.

And then?????

no real ending means 1*

Amen to mikoda's rating and critique. rk

Good story, just a too short!

It was a bit too short.

Perfect Goldilocks story. Not too long. Not too short. Just right for content.

Good chuckle over the commentator who thinks it has "no real ending". It was certainly terminal for the participants.

To those of you bitching about the story having no ending or being too short, what don’t you understand about “750 word” stories?

The challenge of writing one of these is known, and when an author is able to describe an entire scene so we’ll, like this one has, I can only applaud. 750 words really isn’t that much.

If this scene stirs your imagination, contact the author and see if he/she is alright with you taking this premise and building a longer story, with a satisfying ending. I’m sure plenty here would love to read it.

What does.an Uncle's nakedness due to.sleeping with your aunt have to do with this? Leviticus 20:20, at the end.

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A nice short sharp SHOT!

11/10!!!!!

GOOD JOB!

Sounds good to me, I'd like more stories like this.

Yes! I am an Old Testament gal, myself!

Short and with the power

Well done. I think you meant Lev 20:10 again there at the end, not Lev 20:20. Just a simple typo. As I said, well done. Well written. 5 stars.

I love to read the comments of any story that I actually read all the way through. They can be fun and often thought provoking. I enjoy all people and our differences, and never judge anyone unless they are purposefully into causing people or animals pain…and that is evil in my view. After all, we are just human beings…not God…and we all make mistakes…lots of mistakes. So, if I do feel judgement, I want to judge the actions people do, and not the people doing them. (However, I do strongly believe in protecting myself, my loved ones and humanity from evil people. They need to be dealt with, [non violently,] and I am all for that!)

That said, the comments made regarding this 750 word snapshot, help explain the belief (for many, not all) behind the strong BTB desire so often shown here in Loving Wives. I frankly had never thought of the Old Testament as the driving and justifying force behind it. But it does make sense, now that it is admitted to, doesn’t it?

I have only one thought for people who live by the Old Testament and its judgmental condemnations. Be careful what you wish for and believe in. You are only human, and not perfect. The Old Testament judgements work for you, as well as those you judge.

Peace

Merlin

Loved it! I would like this fleshed out maybe into a series. Legendary fighting skills needs to be explored!

Brilliant. Amazingly succinct and thoughtful. And it's amazing how everything is clarified when you know there's a right and a wrong in life. Need much more like this.

How can you ever trust the judgment of an adult who still has imaginary friends? His wife and workers are better off without such a lame little person in their lives.

Kiwihunter.......dang y'all are funny. The MMC has imaginary friends...............lmao.

So does 750 word story mean you can’t do a follow up story to wrap everything up? Or is it that you won’t because that holds no interest for you?

Awesome. Brilliant. Who would have guessed it, some kind of sense of reality and morality on this website.

There are some great truths in life. The first one: There is a God.

The second one: you are not Him.

Good, no bs, direct to the point, too short.

Cute story. Thanks.

Too much beginning left you with no room for resolution. Unsatisfying.