All Comments on 'Omega Pride Ch. 09'

It may be a bit dark, but it's to be expected out of the massacre. I do enjoy your story though. Please finish it. I need to see her fully trust her mate and be one with her wolf. Also, keeping this comment short and sweet. (Damn phone)

Your writing is gud, nothing is wrong with it being dark, the only problem is you take 2long 2post the next chapter

Please post next chapter. Dying for next chapter. Hurry please.

Thanks for the translations french is not my strong side, throw me Spanish or Norse I can handle it but French...

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That was fucking awesome. Great chapter. Please dont disappear again

Love it can't wait for the next ch.

Please don't use them to such an extent -- they are just too hard to read, which is frustrating with such a great story.

Amazing chapter, can't wait for the next :-)

There is not another story on here like this. Well if it is, I haven't found it. Thank you for this and continuing it. I look forward to your next chapter.

Please hurry with the next chapter! I love your work!

Thank you for finally cont the story of Delphi and Wyatt, been checking back weekly for updates. Love the characters. Cant wait for Delphi to kick some major azz, in and out the Delaney pack. Wouldnt it be a hoot if she is even stronger that the alpha fem.

I love your story, every time there is a new chapter I can't wait to read it. Eagerly waiting the next chapter.

thanks after a while readers begin to forget whats happened in the last chapter and its not so special. Please can you write another chapter quickly. Thanks xx

I actually didn't have the much italics on the first page when I wrote it. The site editor must have accidentally made the entire 1st page full of them. Sorry for that guys.

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Happy to see this post and I am not disappointed. Excellent chapter,loved the back story with the visions. Very well done CC,looking forward to the next chapter

It is so wonderful to see this installment of Omega Pride hit the New Stories. You have seamlessly flowed into this chapter. What I appreciate most of all, however, is your artful development of the main character and their story. Some authors fall into a trap of having their characters "stall" in their growth. Keep moving them through logical development and unfolding of their layers. I cannot wait to see chapter 10.

Amazing as always. I am starting to put together some of the hints you have given about Delphi. Now I am simply waiting to see if they are in fact right in any way. I love your writing style and I love this story. I can't wait for the next chapter as always.

I follow a few authors and you are someone I always check in on. I hope that you will post more soon. This is an interesting development to the story and I'm looking forward to seeing what you do with it. Will there be more character development between Wyatt and Delphi? Will Wyatt be able to handle Delphi if she isn't an Omega? I can't wait to find out! Thanks again and keep up the great work.

i cant wait to see what happens next!!!

I love this story and can't wait for the next chapter. :)

Why do they want her? What gifts did she give away that caused her pack to be killed? She has been shot in the head twice in her visions yet still lives. Will she finally stop the pathetic I'm an Omega crap and finally be what she is supposed to be? Will her wolf finally spill why she is keeping hush?

There are so many simple grammatical mistakes that would easily be caught by one of the volunteer editors that it's silly you don't have one. Take some time, read some of the notes that the volunteers make and pick someone who's a good fit for you.

It's also okay to have multiple editors for a single story. One might focus on the technical aspects of writing while another might provide creative feed-back.

As far as the French-to-English translation idea goes, it was an inspired idea and for the most part well done. It's those kinds of things that draw people into the story and make it feel more plausible; as if it could really happen.

What I didn't like about this chapter is there was no flow. It read like a shopping list. "Delphi and Wyatt went for a hike, and then they met an old woman, and then they killed some big game, and then they went to Delphi's old pack grounds, and then they fought a monster, and then they went home, and then Delphi went for a run."

The rest of the chapters are interconnected and there's a feeling of character continuity and flow. What I mean by "flow" is the chapters are like the sections of a centipede. They're connected and work together to form the whole. There is no segue between chapters eight and nine leaving chapter nine feeling disjointed and out of place. The easiest and most common segue is describing the character's physical surroundings.

I think your trying to give your readers a heart attack!! Please get chapter 8 up soon! Oh and the little monster baby thingy was SO freaky!

but the plot and the pace are both so much better than in the previous two chapters. Now, all we need is for Delphi to put on her big girl panties and stop playing the whiny, why me card. That would be perfect.

Looking forward to Chapter 10!

This is really a fantastic read. Yeah, I went past any grammatical error because I was trying to guess what was going to happen next. She has childhood memories, an ancient hard to kill enemy wants her dead, but they smell like her cousin. Hmmm. Was her cousin taken and someone used her to engineer something? Hmmm. I am totally loving your story. Can't wait for the next chapter. I am trying to figure out her wolf. Is she trying to protect her or guide her to something? Not sure about that. I just want her wolf to show up and kick Wyatt's unsavory pack members ass. I am not interested in their willful ignorance and hatefully murderous intent on those perceived as weaker. I want Delphi to clean house period. Whatever power she has someone wants and because they can't have it they want her dead I think. LOL I have to go back and re-read your chapters. Delphi is an Alpha. Why her family was in hiding is interesting. That missing cousin could be good or bad, time will tell. Thanks for taking us on this journey. Good luck with your grammar, it seems to rub folks wrong. I did not have a problem with the English and French back and forth. I don't speak French so I skip over it and move onto the language I know. I get the moments of extreme emotion and childhood memories so I just follow along. Still a fun read for me. I am glad that Delphi has finally started to communicate with Wyatt in a manner that is effective for the both of them. So now Delphi get's shot, is she awake or blacked out and how come these creatures can track her? They have her blood somehow. My bet is on the missing cousin. But hey, I could be totally WRONG. LOL :)

Hurry and give us more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Awesome story.

However witch version of the thing did you watch. Please keep going I can't wait for the next chapter.

Please update soon! What a great cliffhanger!

Can't wait for the next post, please hurry!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

... and previously commented on one of your other chapters. I am glad you had some editorial help. However, there remain a few English grammatical and spelling mistakes e.g.

"You're wolf knows, Delphi," Wyatt told her.

This should be 'your' which is a possessive pronoun and not 'you're' which is short for 'you are'. I see this used a lot by native English speakers as well and it irks me.

"And you're starring (sic)" - probably a typo? It should be 'staring'.

I hope your editors have time to go through your other installments otherwise the change in tone of this chapter is too different and hence jarring when following the other (unedited) chapters. I quite liked Delphi's rather distinctive French-flavoured speech patterns and wish you had just kept them as they were because now she doesn't sound quite so exotic (instead she sounds just like everyone else).

Anyway, this kept me up all night as it was a page-turner and I am way past my bedtime! I look forward to the next installment!

What do these creatures want her dead so badly that they still hunt her after all these years? You better finish this story or we won't forgive you! :)

I hope she's not dead!! I know she's not ;). Hurry up with the next chapter though! Im hooked and can't wait to read more.

The fight scene was done so well, I could visualize every detail. And this mystery you've got going is killing me it's so good! Off to read chapter 10; hope more is on the way soon...

...I love the fight scenes...they are well written. Yet, I think your introduction of the abilities to speak across time, telepathy are chaotic and confusing. I get the possible cloning issues of the villians and the schizophrenic aspects of Delphi is fascinating but just damn confusing as well especially with the language being written in French AND English...That takes up too much damn space that you could have just italized the words with a preface or epilogue explanation that she was speaking in French. I hope you didn't write yourself into a corner with this one. Her Alpha would not have allowed her to run by herself no matter how safe the environment is after what they been through....you contradict yourself in giving characterizations and subsequent actions. Whatever man..this was a 4 cuz there was no sex! xp It's your universe and I'm just a Peeping Tom passing through!

I passed this story so many times now I wished I didn't cause I love it.

Please tell me they brought the sword.

All the French is stupid. Just clouds the story, boggs things down for the readers for no real gain. I'm tourist level fluent. I love the language. But you are crippling your story.