by Chameleongirl
Well-constructed even though I knew what was coming. A little more detail would have helped in the story line. Your story is still a 5 Star in the end!
As yet the story can be made more exciting, by elaborating on piercing and (ceryainly !) tattooing.
Very good writing effort - loved the erotic control theme from start to finish! Hope you'll do more stories along similar lines. Regards.