All Comments on 'On Tour'

Excellent. Want more!

Please check discrete vs discreet.

5*

Tc

BASTARD - LOL! Probably one of the worst/best cliffhangers I've read on this site. I hope the next chapter is released tomorrow. 5*

Very nice start, thanks for this! 5/5

It is hard to rate an unfinished story. So far we have interesting characters being developed. Evan's father needs more filling in.

Seems wells written.

So far no wasted story lines, but that awaits the answer to Leila and the chair incident.

While waiting to see if this becomes a truly 5.0 classic Romance, I do have high hopes the author will not disappoint.

The Hoary Cleric

Great story!

5

Great start!! I just hope that the next several chapters keep going towards a wonderful romantic finish for these two lovers. Fine start indeed.

So many errors! Please find an editor.