All Comments on 'Once Upon an Elf'

did mona become maya?

All that buildup in the ending didn't really make any sense

I'm just really confused. Who's Maya? Did she kill the witch? Or was it the sister? Way too rushed TBH

Learn English or get a editor.

Otherwise stop typing please.

This could have been a great story. The elements are there but you chose to skim over the possible good parts to make this a complete story.

1. The quest could have been and should have been more descriptive

2. The sex. Could have used more of that and built up the relationship as they went on the quest together to get all the ingredients.

3. Character names. You could have been more diligent in your editing. Maya? Who is that? How is it possible for her to kill the witch? If it is Mona, how did she get away from Minotaur? And why did you leave us hanging on him getting busy with her?

Again, good base story but you could have told it better. I feel ripped off.