All Comments on 'One and One Is Two'

She should have pretended to b Marcie

Was there a story here....

1 star and no comment

What a great little story. 5 stars.

You are the master. Great story! 5 stars, JB

that was just stupid. one star.

I'd missed this before. Loved it. 5 stars

I'm torn. 4/5

If Grace had any sense she would have divorced Bill,for his disgraceful treatment of her.

That kind of role playing Carrie’s lots of inherent dangers.

Claiming it to be role play still doesn't explain why the wife was wandering around with no bra.

Well done. It’s a challenge to create suspense. It could probably improve with some rewriting, but the basics are very solid. Kudos!

cleareyedguy

"It could probably improve with some rewriting"

You get what you pay for.

He made an understandable assumption but it turned out to be a Great mistake.

Bill S.

LOL

"Only because your big cock is so much bigger and better than my husband's and because you promised to cum on my tits, Jack!"

This last line is not what a husband wants to hear. His one wife telling a make believe Jack that his cock is bigger than her husbands and to cum on her tits. After what he went through, that would drive him away and considering divorce.

Terrible

I normally like your writing, but this one had the names so mixed up I couldn't tell who was who. That makes the story confusing, to say the least.

A cute light story with a twisted ending. It’s only a story.

Interesting, until the last sentence. I'd piss on my wife if she tried to blow me after saying that!

Good story. Is Jack bigger? If not, it’s an amusing role play. If he is it is a dangerous comment. Or is she spurring him to be more dominant.

LOL

That last line definitely threw a damper on things.

The other issue I see is that Marcie was nowhere to be seen at the first party. Whether Marcie was quiet and mousy or not ... you she have really let Grace sit there in the arm of the chair with Jack's hand in her ass in front of all their friends?

Grace had been denying Bill sex on a regular basis for a long time, why would he believe that she went to the party without a bra just to entice him?

Too many little details seem to point to what Bill thought he heard being the truth.

2 Stars, because Grace made it clear at the ending that she had sucking old Jack on her mind... So, if she already wasn't hooking up with him; she soon would be. What a wimp !