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AnonymousAnonymousabout 5 years ago
Run-on Sentences

An editor who is fluent with punctuation usage could help with the many run-on sentences. Then the story would read much better.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 5 years ago
both stories

WOW!!!!! Fantastic. Will there be more to this series?

kinkygeezerkinkygeezerabout 5 years ago
Let It Snow

Loved your story short and to the point and love the way you write, this is not an English essay!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 5 years ago
"Little?"

A good story and very enjoyable. My only objection is the use of the word little when describing the women or their body parts. Children are little, not grown women. It just grates a bit. Thanks

AnonymousAnonymous11 months ago

Good story just needs to be extended to more chapters.

AchtungNightAchtungNight6 months ago

First time I’ve enjoyed a two girl plus guy threesome with no FF stuff, though that would of course be welcome in a future chapter. ;)

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