All Comments on 'One Incredible Night'

These are supposed to be, like, stories? You know, plots, motives, believable behavior?

Take your hand off your you know what and start using your frontal lobes. Sorry you're not getting any. Keep trying.

Candy

Three hotties at once. Nice dream but only H Hefner could pull that one with a little bit of help

Three hotties at once. Nice dream but only H Hefner could pull that one with a little bit of help

"I became friends with a couple of girls. Amy, Michelle, and Beth"

Er, couple = 2

Perhaps you should spend more time educating yourself and less playing with yourself.

Certainly, please spend less time submitting here until you learn to write.

For a first try this is OK. You should have more plot but hopefully that will come. I am guilty of run-on sentences and you have run-on paragraphs, we bith need to work on it. Don't let those know it alls get you down. Keep trying. I-WISH

Think they are being a bit harsh.

For a first effort it was quite good and certainly erotic.

Keep trying