All Comments on 'One Loving Mother'

Something that dark needs more details in the description. You need to pull the reader in. You caught my interest but not peaked it. More details. More on the kids thoughts as well as hers during and after acts.

You've painted a pretty dark picture here. You show us a mother raping her son, yet the only setup to the action could be considered crazy. Who is mother talking to in what would normally be internal dialogue. Sometimes it seems she's talking to herself, at other times she might be talking to the absent husband or was it her inner demon? The meds are for....? Mental, maybe?

Sorry, but I found this a very unsatisfactory read. On the positive side, except for what I think were a few lapses in tense, the mechanics of writing didn't seem too bad to me.

But pussy is pussy, and a young stud like him should take advantage of her wanting to give him all of the pussy he can handle.

Hell, he may even fuck her brain straight, and make her a good lover.

I love these type of stories, where mother is the aggressor. I would like to see mommy tying her son to the bed and raping him for days. Hope it will happen. :)

It's a fun and sexy story, but the lack of proper punctuation and absence of italics make it difficult to read. Private thoughts should be in italics. Use quotes and commas for dialog. And PLEASE, organize your thoughts so you can communicate the story to your readers. Reading it is like driving on a bumpy and jarring road.