All Comments on 'One Night Ch. 03-04'

few grammar issues and typos but not many. one big thing that jumps out are your dates. she spent new years eve at his place but the dates at the beginning show the a period of days in the middle of december, which is another thing if it the next morning why do you have the dates listed as 2 days?

it took me a moment to figure out what you meant.

the dates are when i wrote it, if you're refering to the specific days listed at the top of each chapter. i leave the written-on dates on all my writing. if that's distracting i can have it taken off.

thank you.

Your writing is excellent for such a new author! Your sex scenes are some of the hottest I've seen and if you don't deserve a hot designation I'm not sure who does. Keep it up. I do agree with the other poster that you should avail yourself of one of the volunteer editors, it would make your already great writing that much better!

Thanks a lot! I have only recently started submitting, but I have been writing for about 7 years, and writing "romantic" stories for 5 or so of those. I'm very proud of my work. Things like typos and errors of that sort I always feel are easily worked out, but my stories and characters are my pride and joy. I'm really glad you enjoyed this. Thank you so much! <3