All Comments on 'One of Those Girls'

Please lengthen it a bit, going into more detail. Also, please check pronoun usage...he/she

I enjoyed the premise and the fact the relationship between Elissa and Greg seems to be consensual (too many people can't keep the non-consent out of their BDSM), but the whole thing just seems so abrupt. The story is abbreviated to the point most of the truly erotic psycho-sexual aspects of an exploration of D/s are glossed over entirely.