All Comments on 'Orc Dominion: Rebellion Ch. 11'

I liked the battle scene. It shwoed that orcs are not invincible and their victory cannot be taken for granted. I am looking forward to the next chapter. Hopefully Jeanette will have a major role in it and will be fucked roughly.

My first critique if you will, is that you provide translation for the Orc language, especially if you plan to use it going forward. Nothing irks me more than reading a story that has a language system in it with no frame of reference. My favourite books all contain, either translations or a Codex or Lexicon of some sort.

Ok enough of my pet peeve. This was an interesting Chapter, a view from the other side if you will. I only wish that it had been slightly longer but hey you can't have everything. In general it was very nice to get some information from the other side of the fence, their struggles, their victories, their story, too often these things are one-sided. I found Thomas and his Orc Wench an interesting side, it certainly showed the corruption of the elite, "Orc's are bad unless they're in my bed and know their place". Further it let you in on camp life, the spoils of war, and the brutality that follows that life style, so we'll done.

Now the battle itself was short but sweet and although not a successful campaign served to address or meet a number of useful markers. It emphasized a significant turn for or Antagonists, in that their war may well be lost. It gave us an indication that some key players may still be active, while others may have met their end, and it showed some folks (Thomas in this case) as being more opportunistic than a true idealists. He simple cut bait an ran, while his counterpart did what military men do, stay with their men.

The Cindy thing was a good way to draw a close to this chapter without giving too much of the pie away. We are able to find out that she is still alive and maybe not so well, while at the same time hearing about the conclusion of the battle you so deftly left us in the dark about. One would never give a prisoner like her all of the info, but certainly enough to dishearten her, so well done there. I know I am probably on the side of the few when I say, if Tourag is dead at the end of this so much the better as I truly enjoy the Queens current relationship and all the interesting complexities it presents. I sincerely hope she is pregnant again and has a difficult if not humiliating time trying to explain it, very similar to her first pregnancy. It kind of confirms the 'Slut Queen' persona our dear friend Cindy has been expounding.

5 stars across the board

I agree with the others that if Tourag were to die so much the better. Jeanette has grown into her role as the warrior queen and I could only see her losing that position if Tourag were to return and reassert himself as the King. As someone mentioned earlier she is more like a queen Elizabeth I who had many lovers along the way.

However I'm not into the pregnancy thing and I can see her having a bottle of the contraceptive tea for her lapses with Gorath. Although one thought to continue the story line later would be if she were to somehow get pregnant with a human baby and have a daughter who grows up to be like her mother in all the special loving ways.

Hoping for more fuck fests with Jeanette and all her lovers/servants as 2 chapters is too long without one....or more.

The next two chapters are going to focus exclusively on Jeanette, Gorath, and Katerei. There will be plenty of fuckfests in them with multiple partners.

Syd,

I can appreciate the desire for a lexicon or translation, but at the same time I also like leaving it open as to what is being said.

Gremlin,

While I do appreciate your viewpoint, pregnancy/impregnation is one of my kinks so that will continue to play a factor, at least in this story. It won't be as big a deal in the next one.

Most people seem to not like turogg. I wonder if that is my failure tobwrite him well, or if people just don't want the Whore Queen holding her back from being the best slut she can be. Either way, the next story will be set after the zentara epilogue, so he will no longer be in the picture.

Hello,

I just wanted to add my two cents in regards to Turogg and readers not caring for him. To me it seems like Turogg came off as a one dimensional character that lacked the personality of the female characters in your stories. Thinking about it, I feel that you write female characters to be more interesting then male characters. The females have contradictions, fears and passions. While the male characters seem kinda flat.

No disrespect intended, I enjoy your writing and I just wanted to comment when I read you asking about people's thoughts on Turogg. Looking forward to more swelling bellies filled with orc babies :)

Anonk,

It's true i do like writing my female characters more. Though I think I can do an even better job. Up till now, I've thought all characterization was is giving a distinctive voice and personality and then having interesting things happen. In the next story I am going to focus on having much more deliberate character arcs that I hope will make my characters more real, relatable, and interesting.

It has taken me a while to accept that turogg is a supporting character. He was supposed to be a co-lead in the first series but it didn't really turn out that way. I hope to do a better job with the male lead in the next story!

I thought this chapter was a another great short addition. Great battle (even though its not my thing still enjoyed it), excellent human on orc racism, and Cindy is back and in a bind! I am definitely looking forward to seeing what is in store in later chapters.

I do personally like the female-centric writing style because I do like the sexual aspects of their triumphs/downfalls. I really never had much of an opinion on Turogg as I felt him to be a very generic brutish character. He was always more of a conqueror without much ulterior motives besides power.

It'd be interesting if future chapters showed both sides of the conflict fairly. Seeing Frederick fuck Turogg's orc women might trigger bigger events to happen that can be seen first hand. Maybe it'd fun to delve into the warrior cultures of the orcs and the intolerance and inequities in the human world. I also slightly want to see both sides just trying to one-up each other in humiliating the other side. An escalating need to inspire terror and domination on the other side to achieve their war aims of subjugation and forced submission. The more twisted the better. :)

Thanks again for writing! Don't worry about the chapter lengths imo. I prefer short and sweet over fluff. If it means much, I think your writing style has improved a lot since your earlier stories.

Hey i like your story very very much but that Turogg died i cant understand i liked him, but nevertheless, you can not please everyone. Keep it up !

Thanks for the comment Bladeness. I prefer shorter chapters too, not just from a writer's perspective but as a reader too. When I look at a story here and see it has 5 pages I groan :)

We'll probably not see much more of the other side in this story. But I do have plans to implement what you're talking about eventually!

Anon,

Turogg isn't dead yet, bit this will be his last story. The epilogue will give him a nice send off :)

Have you thought about adding some cuckolding? maybe Tristan having to watch sussana with an orc and Tristan getting humilated?

Thanks for the suggestion anon, but it is probably not something I will pursue. People don't seem to like those themes as much in my stories, and Susannah doesn't have any interest in being ravished by orcs nor would Jeanette make her.

If there are more people out there who really like the femdom stories, let me know because I have one on the queue for Soiled Dove but I was going to do other ones first.

I hope Susannah finds a nice big strong orc to take care of her and fill her with future babies. She's had such a hard life that I'd feel down if she didn't. Though, if she ended up as a bed partner for the Queen...what better fate for two best friends to become even closer? :3

Looking forward to the Soiled Dove stories.

How about some more femdom with Daniels then. I always enjoy the teasing and the domination,,,,it seems to be Jeanette's kink to use him as a pleasure tool.

Although not the most titillating chapter, the battle scenes were very well written and it was satisfying to see the main plot threads begin to resolve themselves. I'm very much looking forward to the conclusion, and even more so to what comes next! I do feel that new, alluring characters like Amelie will keep things fresh.