All Comments on 'Ordinary Love'

I cannot believe the writer is a gal, since she writes soo well about gay love. Keep it up, SH!

*Very* well done. I like a story of love, rather than what has been called a 'stroke story'. There is at least one other female writer of gay romance in Literotica that you might like. Her pen-name is WavyScribe. Look for the title 'The Magic in Your Touch'. You remind me of her slightly. (Trust me, that *is* a high compliment.)

How nice to read an actual story with real characters! My only caveat -- and it is a small one -- is to more carefully proofread (there were a few small errors) and to find another word for smirk. LOL But really, this was a nice romance and I look forward to reading more from you.

A lot of feeling and understanding here. Well done!

This is a promising start for a new author. I agree with what several posters have already written (smirk, proofreading etc.) I also seems like the story was written at two different times (the ending a bit more rushed). I think that you should make sure to devote the same amount of time to the ending as you do to the beginning...especially in short stories. Otherwise, not a bad first submission. EEP

I loved your boys. Evan is sweet and clueless...Emily is supportive. Great story. I agree you need to watch the proofreading but I don't feel like it detracted from your story to much. Good work

Sweet story. My only complaint is a common mistake that drives me crazy. Men have a PROSTATE (no R). Lying face down is called PROSTRATE.

i love these kinds of stories!!! grammar/spelling mistakes didn't bother me one bit! i love how you slowly built their relationship (brad seeing evan with his shirt off... brad tackling evan... brad being jealous.... great work!!!)

SEXY AND ROMANTIC...GREAT JOB

this was really good story..but why on earth did you stop writing??i hope more is on its way....i love it

I absoutely loved it. i agree with the other person why did u stop writiting.

I think it was quite lovely, a nice misunderstanding resolved well.

I enjoyed this a lot. Kudos for using a condom. Making the story "safe" does not affect the fantasy.

for a first effort it is quite good very sweet and realistic you have real talent, use it

A wonderful story,so very well written. Please write more!

I enjoyed reading your story. You should write more:-)

see above comments hope the love lasts forever5976

Great Story! Great Read!

Why am I addicted to reading such romantic and amazing stories... WHY!?

Brilliant, just brilliant!

I think I just got cavities from the amount of sweetness in this story. You're wonderful darling!!

I loved this story. It was sexy, and sweet, and just wonderful. I hope you share another story.

The story was so sweet and got hot really good for your first story I ever hope you add another 1 soon

I hate this story because its so beautiful and it makes me so damn jealous arghhhhhhh five stars

Your writing wasn't awful, but there were definitely a few mistakes that interfered with my ability to enjoy the story. The most glaring of which was your use of prostrate instead of prostate.

if a misspelling stops you from enjoying a whole story then you need to get your head checked... god, some readers are dumb!

This was a nice HEA story and I hope the author writes more

I loved your story, I hope you write lots more.

i loved it. you should write more stories.

Please have more to their story. Another flashback if you will. I need more.