by cherryontop1973
I did like this story, but the editing mistakes got in the way.
Very sexy, love your writing style.
Smoking ...
This is but a teaser, but oh what a tease it is...
Hot story, but I found myself stumbling over the ill-placed commas and strange word order. Made it lack fluidity as I had to go back and re-read some sentences in order for them to make any sense.