All Comments on 'Our First Time'

You need to be shot, but really its just your little fantasy, not erotic.

It's not the plot that was bad, it was the lack of buildup, you may as well have started the story off in the hotel room. Also, first person only works if there is some pathos...some empathy for the person. In this case, it was dry, uniformitive, non-erotic and wel...boring.

The only thing that I have to say is; I wish that it would have been longer and more sex written into the story. Other than that I thought it was very nice. Just a secret getaway for elicit sex. Now that's erotic. Thanks

What's the point in all this? It certainly wasn't a story, just a mindless freak trying to express himself. Yikes.

Don't particularly care for first person story telling, lacks that personal emotional feelings that two people should have, especially since it's their first sexual encounter. The story reads like a person talking in monotone. Sex scenes could be more erotic. Not bad for your first effort but not good either, but at least no wimpy male humiliation cuckold theme. Keep writing, but give your stories some background and a little extra spice. Thanks for your efforts.

to find himself or any of the other comments. I think it was some asshole trying to glorify cheating. Seems to be the thing on LWs. The whore slut wife cheats on her husband.In this case it was two married creeps cheating on their spouses. Ha ha look at us we are joining the main of society and cheating..Isn't it marvelous..We have arrived...SHIT and more shit. If you two are unhappy with your mates then get divorced and get married to each other..Oh I see you would wind up cheating on each other..oh well..what can I say except you probably wrote the traversity to jerk off your pathetic little pee pee. At least it performs that task unless you have urinary problems...If you are a woman (possible) then it''s really your smelly cunt... SHIT PUKE ND MORE OF THE SAME...NYMINUS

You are the only one who enjoyed this little piece of shit so far, suprise suprise. Had the cheater been black a couple of your slut buddies would have joined in. If you could still get it up would you jack your dick to this? Pitiful.

Another guiltless cheating whore story.