All Comments on 'Our Little Secret'

Good start and a good idea for a story, however it was and is a little short in length. The teasing between the two of them is very real and sexual and is a big turn on. Gave it a 4 because of the length but it definitely has potential for a long run if you want to go that way. It doesn't have to be super long but long enough so we the reader can actually get into it.

The one good point of being short it does leave the reader wanting more and that is always a good thing for an author. Looking forward to the next installment and hope it won't be long in cumming.

But did this story have to be so short? I'd love to see such a tale continue to a decent length. Oh well...

You can't stop a sexy story just like that! (Pouting) I'm giving you 4 stars only because of where you left off. Please continue the story. I can feel multi part, steamy, sexy, yet romantic love story in this. I have several ideas for continuing the plot. If you care to contact me, feel free.

Length, pace, language, story. Sometimes less is more. Loved it gave it 5

So, "big boy" likes screwing his sister, and maybe has a thing for mom. I presume there is more coming to this tale, or it really means nothing much. 'Well written, saw no obvious mistakes of the usual sort. 'Good pacing. 'Might be nice to have some ID's for the characters. 'Not really a chapter, just a hint of things that may come (cum). 'Hope so!

By the way, a starter would be under the hood (bonnet) not under the car.

Hmmmm ... Her daughter / his wife is sexy so Mama must have had something to do with that !! Maybe he can shag them both ?? I think some physical descriptions / details are in order and Yes a very nice start to a HOT story. Thanks !

Definitely more, both Sister and Mom.....

This was just a little something that popped into my head. It was meant to be a vignette. I wanted to try something that was focused solely on teasing; no names, no sex, no descriptions... just teasing. Maybe one day I'll check back in on them, who knows.

Anyway, this is my first published work, but rest assured, I have much more up my sleeve...

ChasB - The starter on my car is under the engine...

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Does the brother have hairy legs? A hairy chest? Pubes? I know his cock is big because his sister traces its hard length. It sounds as if his sister is teasing him, and as if there is at least some interest from his mother too.

I loved the introduction setting us up for more to come. It was highly erotic.

By the way to Chasb I had a Chrysler Concorde and the starter was at the bottom of the engine.

wow....free car service AND a hard cock!

Your story stands alone. There Is little you could do to improve it. Tantalizing. My imagination churns - no further descriptions or explanations are necessary. Masterful.

What a cliffhanger, left me looking for the next page button. Hoping there will be a continuation of this one. Has great potential

Just enough to whet the appetite, more please, please.

I really enjoyed your story. It was well written and had that touch of realism which makes a tale believable and able to be mentally visualised. ("visualised" instead of visualized because I am an Australian :)

Kind regards, James

...because it served only to whet the appetite, leaving this reader hungry and wanting the main course. Too much tease, not enough fulfillment of whispered promises.

I love the tease. Masterful writing. Not one word wasted and not another word needed. More, please.

Once again, wonderfully conceived and drawn. Again, though, with the head shaking and groaning, and too many gazes.

Given some of what flies around here, this vignette is a treasure. Thanks, a perfect one of its kind.

and, oh, what a tease! this was the second story of yours that I read, and I love it!

All families should experience such uninhibited love

Well told. Thanks for posting it.