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Click hereThe sun rose higher, and in the distance the ancient town spires gleamed in heartless mockery.
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GrushaVashnadze3 months agoAuthor@countdowntolov3, thanks so much for the compliment. And for the criticism. Perhaps the last line was a touch self-indulgent, as I know that particular town well (and the university it hosts), and its dysfunction was part of the inspiration for me to write the story. Some people will recognise the place and understand; others may not. But you make a good point. :)
countdowntolov33 months agoConflicting. Georgina's the time skip for eager to regretful is a real gut punch. But I'm sure that's what you were going for. So full stars.
If you'd take a small piece of criticism: I didn't like the last line. Zooming out to the city felt a strange choice when the arc of the narrative was bringing two character groups together. I also felt the bleakness of Georgina's situation was captured plenty, the unfeeling city felt heavy handed on top of it.
