All Comments on 'Over the Hill White Knight Ch. 01'

perfect

Loved this! I confess it took me a little longer than it should have to realize the *** meant a change in POV, but I guess that's on me. Thank you so much for posting!

Can't wait for the scumbag to start trouble and for our hero to call in his Army buddies as reinforcements.

Excellent writing. A good story, well constructed, and almost without grammatical or spelling errors, despite use of language that nicely avoided being too simple. The POV switch got me too; I’ve always disliked the little headers to warn the reader of the change, but perhaps I see the utility of them now! One of the best descriptions of cunnilingus I’ve ever come across (pun intended). Thanks

5 stars so far - I am liking this story.

I am a vet, so I appreciate the mil references.

Please keep writing and get rid of Brett as quickly as possible.

Thanks for your work. It's great. I Will wait so anxious for next Parts of this series!! Best regards

Good start

***** Five Stars - Really hooked on this one and can't wait for it to be completed.

Old Man

Please continue this!!!