All Comments on 'Pamela'

Reluctant, not reticent; unless you meant he was reluctant to speak while naked. You changed verbal tense mid-paragraph; future, preterite, and past participle don’t go together.

There are too many volunteer editors who frequent this website to pass up on refining your work.

Good Cfnm story juggling the best elements in a more sweet and romantic style. Good characters and descriptive settings. I’d enjoy a another chapter or two. I wish I understood the previous commenter’s grammar lesson. I’m sure I could use that advice too. I was going to suggest it’s ok to use contractions. Sometimes they’re easier on the dialogue flow. L O R

Brett78x

Try to get one of those volunteer editors to answer you as a beginning writer. Have yet to have any response.

Thank you for your comment. I will try to get an editor response for my next story. I will let you know how that turns out. I have tried four times before and it has not worked.

Anonymous thank you for your comment.

I know I am far from a perfect writer.

This story is amazing! I love the build up as things got steamier. Also, they way they flirted and teased each other in the beginning was fantastic!

VERY hot, erotic and well written story! I was edging the entire time I was reading your story. CFNM, femdom and male submissiveness are all a HUGE turn-on for me. I'm going to go back and read your earlier stories. Please keep writing and add more episodes to the "Pamela" story.